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12-07-03, 01:26 AM | #1 | ||||||
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The Prophecy
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One More Chance feat. LM - Formula
Can't Stop - N.I.Z Life feat. MC Uski - Masta C this is a piece about philosophical self-glorification.. it also very shallowly delves into my person life and childhood... but its really a kind of piece which "intelligently" promotes my own rapping... peace, hope you enjoy it The Prophecy [chorus]x2 The prophecy... Has come to pass [verse 1] Some 13 years ago, in a European hospital A woman gave birth to the greatest being possible The family was overjoyed, it was their first son Little did they realise that he was a cursed one He appeared to be normal, he had no physical ails But he was like milk in a bottle, a literal jail Somethin' predicted his fail, wrote and scripted his tale It was like his mental designs were encrypted in Braille As he grew to be older, he sensed an internal dragon He felt colder, but was trapped in an infernal chasm He couldn't fathom the pain, at this stage of his life So he began to unleash his furious rage on the mic [chorus]x2 [verse 2] As the sand in the hourglass flowed, so did his life Time went by, but it didn't seem to have imaged right The proportion, the ratio of peace to distortion His existence was unbalanced, he was beatin' abortion Every day of his life, he was challenged to survive The intense mental anguish that banished his sight His ability to forsee the consequences of actions The reactions of other people's responsive patterns So socially he was inept, somethin' of an outcast He presumed it was cos of neglect, soon his doubt past His assumptions of failure in relationships Were confirmed, he could never be cool or play a bitch Or make it rich, when the fuckin' riches were still candy He sought the world, but couldn't even rule the school canteen His life at home deteriorated, parents didn't matter no more His anger was fear initiated and it shattered the doors The boundries that constrained his mind from findin' a cure His pain was so great it provoked his mind to think pure Then he realised, to successfully ease his spirit He'd have to breathe his image through his speech and lyrics [chorus]x2 [verse 3] In the year 2004, a new era is born The hip-hop world will be changed by a new terror reform The game will forever morph at the hands of a prodigy Who will stack on skills like cards in Monopoly He will bring with him skills unused, he will bring his youth His powerful words will only ever be rich in truth His voice will provoke thought, and enrichment through song It will set his soul free, like a swimmin' dewgong You might not care about his existence, but altogether The only thing that matters is beatin' the stormy weather And that he will acheive by sheddin' his skin like a serpent To reveal his new form in which he'll be... perfect And keep in mind this prophecy, for future reference For all those who defy him will have no repentance He was a slave to the mind, chained up and blind Now he has dominated the fate of the rhymes [chorus]x2 |
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12-07-03, 01:29 AM | #2 | |||
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This was a straight drop hommie. Telling a story, that is somthing that will keep people reading. So smart choice on the topic. Maybe work on your vocab and rhyme scheme, but thats about it. It had a consistant flow, never fell off. I was feeling a couple of lines in there alot. This was a good drop hommie.
7.5 / 10 ( only cause I grade really hard ) ---> Can you return the favor and peep the link in my sig. I know for a fact you will like it, aight hommie. much appriciated... OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion
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12-07-03, 01:32 AM | #3 | ||||||
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^ thanks for the positive feedback... i tried to make up for the vocab with multie rhymes, they are throughout the entire song.. dunno if u noticed.. but thanks for the feedback, heaps appreciated... i'll check out your piece for sure
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12-07-03, 01:37 AM | #4 | |||||
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Damn nice go at this topic
Seen people step to it but not as good as this so i think u did the topic great and the last verse is new i havent seen people tell the future in thier rap that often. gg.
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12-07-03, 01:41 AM | #5 | ||||||
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this was a nice Open Mic.....i felt tha topic.....not much wrong in it.......enjoyed the read....wasn't too long or too short......word play was done nicely So ummm 9/10..tha shit was tight Kuz
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12-07-03, 01:43 AM | #6 | ||||||
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^ thanks.... it means alot to me to hear someone say that... your support is appreciated
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12-07-03, 02:07 AM | #7 | ||||
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Yeah i agree with them this was a good piece here....it made a good read i thought as well....your flow was pretty good in this i though, stayed on point through out it...your vocab was alright...structure was real good i thought....good content in this....overall good piece...keep at it.
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12-07-03, 02:41 AM | #8 | ||||||
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^ thanks heaps.... up
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12-07-03, 02:46 AM | #9 | |||||||
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excellent man., one of the best I’ve seen. I enjoyed reading the
whole thing. everything about it was great. flow, rhymes, structure, vocab, and you know wut I mean. I enjoyed how it was written. as it someone was reading straight out of a book…nice man much props…9.5/10…stay up… peace ps. check my thread out plz…thanx |
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12-07-03, 02:53 AM | #10 | |||||||
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Yeah this shit was dope, one of the best ive seen from you, i enjoy reading your peices, great great great work, the story was dope the imagery was dope, flow was almost perfect, the vocab was as good as it had to be, it was a dope peice and keep writin rymes
pce 9.999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999999 99999999999999999999/10
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12-07-03, 02:56 AM | #11 | |||||||
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i would like to hook up with you for a collab
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12-07-03, 09:17 AM | #12 | ||||||
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This was good.. It made a nice read.. The braile line was quaote worthy.. but i'm too lazy, lol.. Your multis held the flow on this one.. The structure did get a bit repetitive.. but it was very good at the first part.. um.. yeah.. very nice take on this concept..
Go return the favour on any of mine.. Pz |
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12-07-03, 10:55 AM | #13 | |||||||
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i'll admit this was a real nice spit.
All lines flowed nicely and all multis were perfect. this inspires me, ya see the post you read was just a no topic keystyle, so dont judge me on that piece. Cuz of this ill write something good. |
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12-07-03, 11:36 AM | #14 | |||||||
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This was nice dawg.
Flow and multies were on target. Like you said...you were tryin to make up for vocab with multies and thats exactly what you did. Structure was great and overall a really good drop. 9/10 |
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12-07-03, 02:06 PM | #15 | ||||||
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thats hard dude
good flow, excellent actually good vocab and story tellin keep postin man .................................................. |
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