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Old 09-06-03, 02:15 AM   #1
2hot2handle
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i burn you

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my rhymes here are so acidic that they burn flames that burn to your stomach/
they create the heat that combines with solar power/
it creates so much shit that your rhymes start to turn sour/
once i burn you i crumble you up into ashes/
all black and white is what you find in trashes/
you look like a shit ass cigarette butt on the road bein run over by automobiles and other vehicles/
your gay ass butt is what gets fucked when you start to spit/
cause they are not even literate, your rhyme scheme is a joke like a skit/
your illusions are so gay you make elton john look heterosexual/
and you make benzinos songs look lyrical/
your like an expired label on a carton/
this rhyme your startin is a sin like signin to murda to get at 50 and em/
you better start to run you pussy ass hoe/
when they ask your sexuality you say i dont know/
cause you are so confused by these rhymes that they flip and spin your mind into so many positions/
that i cause submissions that make you quit/
that make you sick its like you were ja for 6 months and dissed so much he turned into a dick/
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Old 09-06-03, 08:35 AM   #2
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u need work
your bar lentch was way off....too much chop and change
rhyming wasnt very good....quite a few places where it was poor
as a newb's boasting piece its alright
seemed like u were trying to rhyme words instead of writinf a verse and fitting the rhyme scheme in with it
and use word play multies to make it better
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