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Spits are Due tonight by 5:00 Is that koo cuz im at skool and dont get out til 3:15
so whatchu think?????

checkin in... kool, btw it's 7 o'clock here, u from outside uk?

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you betta' pack yo' trunk up nelly and head yo' ass down to the circus/
i betcha yo' gangsta friends love gettin' head when you suck on their boz cuz/
with a dum-ditty-dum you succumb an' get yo' bum humped til the shit goes numb/
you all like yum wen you drinkin' cum, you are scum from the slum/
what makes you think you can come an' fuck with Dr Greenthumb/
ya can drop a flow an show ya face now that schools... out/
i don't go cos rules are the tools used on fools... no doubt/
yo' rhymes are like boomerangs, they come right back in yo' face/
you post an' before you look back, bang, ma killa punches flowin' like bass/
i set the pace an' it leaves every trace of this disgrace's head in space/
hydroponic finds these flows while smokin' demonic chronic/
gin an' tonic power the punches an' keep them harmonic/
i don't even care if i win, cos ma glock still got you foamin' at the chin/
ma heartless grin causes goosebumps in yo' skin/
the only time you've wished for an identical twin to hold on the firing pin/
i'm like a lowrider, ma hydraulics bouncin' on yo' head/
brainscramblin' metabolics, shred you too threads/
i dun' even know why i'm battlin' this fuckin' piece of shit/
from the NYC, ha ha ha ma gattlin' gun'll sort you son, now spit.../

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yo, where u at??

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i have the rhymes that cause music to scream suspense,
keep opponents tense,u jus a newbie dat makes no sense/

******Multi*****
i spit actual facts on actual tracks you failin and fallin through lyrical cracks,tryna learn from the masta but you cant so take ya claws off ma back/

cashinova frontin wit fake dolla bills when he cant escape my lyrical travisties
its to late to elevate,,,yur styles more rotten then a mouth fulla cavities/

Im the real king and you just a Slave next to my table,
you cant win battles when puertoricanelly leaves ya body diabled/

wit every punch ill make ya jerk back,cuz you aint worf jack
**********I dont steal from old ladies so take ya purse back***********

dis was a good battle

buzz only reason i didnt like yo verse u have 2 shorten yo linezz it can be better than dat u had some tite shit juss yo verse was long


puertoricanelly your verse was tite ish i liked yo flow and yo punches
nice structure also

bestline-i spit actual facts on actual tracks you failin and fallin through lyrical cracks,tryna learn from the masta but you cant so take ya claws off ma back

worste line-none

buzz-

bestline-hydroponic finds these flows while smokin' demonic chronic/
gin an' tonic power the punches an' keep them harmonic/

worsteline-

you betta' pack yo' trunk up nelly and head yo' ass down to the circus/
i betcha yo' gangsta friends love gettin' head when you suck on their boz cuz/


overall

punches-puertoricanelly
flow-puertoricanelly
structure-puertoricanelly
personals-buzz
vocab-puertoricanelly
winner-puertoricanelly

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this was a good battle, you two. Props to both gentlemen. But here's the verdict.

hydroponic_buzz-You had nice flow, and rapid delivery. the words flowed together and connected well(hydroponic finds these flows while smokin' demonic chronic/
gin an' tonic power the punches an' keep them harmonic/). What one likes the most about a verse is being able to say it to yourself, as you're reading it and it sounding nice. Which in this case it did. What had me lost was the second line though.

i betcha yo' gangsta friends love gettin' head when you suck on their boz cuz/

what is boz, and how does it rhyme with circus. Thats a problem i had. but luckily you followed through wit a decent line afterwards, which kept me listening which is very essential to crowd, or in this case, reader manipulation. It was a well rounded verse in my opinion, and i liked the lenght of it. Just enough, not too much. We'll call it a satisfying quickie before work.


puertoricanelly-Good performance, it had a prizefighter format, and that's what i like. Like i said before, battling is about getting the crowd involved, and that format forces one to want to read it. Your multis were on point i liked them. And you left hydroponic with a stinging last blow before the bell rang for the end.

wit every punch ill make ya jerk back,cuz you aint worf jack
**********I dont steal from old ladies so take ya purse back***********

that was nice. However the problem was this. Your verse was too general. it didn't too much attack him directly. it was more a boast of the self rather than battling him. And i'm disappointed to say that's why you lost my vote. IF it were a more direct full on assault i think you could've taken this one. But that is what separates the battler from the freestyler. Hydroponic made direct attacks at you. So my vote goes to hydroponic.

uppin...

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uppin... c'mon peeps...

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flow- Buzz (though the verses were long it had a good flow throughout)
punches - puertoricanelly (hit harder than Buzz with some of his lines)
best line - you all like yum wen you drinkin' cum, you are scum from the slum/
what makes you think you can come an' fuck with Dr Greenthumb/ - Buzz
Open - puertoricanelly (made more sense and had a better rhyme)
finisher - Buzz (had more of a punch than puertoricanelly on the finisher)

my vote goes to Buzz

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c'mon can we get some more feedback, i been votin' in y'all battles...

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okay im votin on every battle im tired of seein da same shit up

opener-nelly...buzz ya shit was 2 long and it didn't ryhme
structure-nelly..buzz shortin ya lines
punchlines-nelly
creativity-nelly
multis-nelly...u had some nice ones dunn
personals-nun
enjoyed-nelly of course...i think he took all catagorie's...buzz i dotn know whut da tell u gotta be creative with ya shit it was madd basic

my vote-pr nelly....yo return dat favor ya'll da link r in my sig and dont give me a hate vote cuzz i aint vote 4

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U NOT FUKKiN WiTH ME PLaiN N SiMP!...

Da "SiCKEST ON DiS SiTE" LiNE HaS BEEN USED aGaiNST ME 50 x'S...U DUDES aBUSED iT

puertoricanelly dang dawg, i think ur rhymes were off the chain,
they flowed easy, melt in ur mouth nor in ur hands, lol
You also had nice vocab, holla.

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