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Old 05-27-06, 01:04 AM   #1
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Exclamation Between US

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Between Us

As I looked deep into her frantic eye’s of love
Emotions rage and adjure that she was sent from above.
With a lifeless measure of admirable respect for self
She had beauty, passion, and essence with a lone touch to tell
With a feeling non describable brought forth to earth.
One to open up secrets that’s what you call a woman’s worth
Staying up late nights Dialing my number down
To help you with bad times, to turn you frown inside out
This secret love affair that drifts between two souls within the air is careless
Driving away from the promises we made and capturing with such finesse’
No one will understand the vow that is made between this woman and this man
I hold on to his hand in hopes that he grips onto mine with a passionate plan
I held him close and felt a love that could stop the world from spinning
Close my eyes and picture his face that always carried a new beginning
I can’t share these thoughts with another soul so I look to you for a sense of reality
It derives between us; the meaning of a new lust, and we can’t escape from mortality

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When I would look at you, I get the butter of flies
With a touch of shy presence, when I would look into your eye’s
I love it when you hold me; you love it when I say
Those three little words, that replays, that just can’t go away.
When trailed tears would fall, I’m always there for you.
To better and interminably comfort you, when feeling sad and blue
I'll never let you go hold you close to my heart and self.
As for now my words speak louder than actions when i say i love to death.
Using our new found sensuality we disappear and fall from the essence of grace
As I am only with you in your dreams when you wake up you will feel my embrace
I was misplaced and gets hard to be here without you, but tonight it’s only you and me
As we lay our heads and close our eyes, loneliness is brought to a lesser degree
People will question the guidance that has lead me to a short but sweet conclusion
And with all the miles that separate us, this love is worth the depressing illusion
With everything I know and everyone I meet, with every touch I feel I think of you
When its all said and done, the scary part is that it’s painful to wake up and bid you adieu



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Old 05-27-06, 01:16 AM   #2
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Old 05-27-06, 01:34 AM   #3
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damn this was hot.. i got love for poetry and this was crazy..

there was some damn nice quotes every line too..

Keep with Expression man.. tis doin good..

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Old 05-27-06, 08:28 AM   #4
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Old 05-27-06, 01:24 PM   #5
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yup yup. pretty tight. nice flow but u could have changed some of the words differently and put some more multies in there. some internal rhyming would help alil too. but none the less this was pretty tight. over all i liked the 2ndverse. that chick is cool.
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Old 05-28-06, 02:39 AM   #6
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Thanks peeps for the feed!
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Old 05-28-06, 03:21 AM   #7
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ayo upping this shit man!..
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Old 05-29-06, 06:48 PM   #9
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