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Old 12-18-03, 05:26 PM   #1
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Line for Line - ft/ Abolish

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AbSTraCT . . more of a reaction or emotional state// kinda like jumpin' for joy,
BUT - because ya told to play.. with the aces, no basis of the matrix
we makeshift// and take with ease - in each emcee, as a structure for basics..
every pace on the pavement lays another stone bed
so you can continue to find the place to finally lay your head
your road will take a bend, to stand is worth a try but
safety remains down, since all your falls will lie up
let your thoughts minus, cuz the climax you can't bypass
cuz your in for surprises, these sights you can't imax
a land of reverse, vulgar slurs, shouts, all in mute words
the path headed worse, but first, take a walk with the birds..
TaLK through a verse in second, blessin lessons third// message words
straps dead in hearse, but the transmission has no worth// the birds're
Flippin' upward, but manually i`m stuck in fourth// of course, i`d love to
face y`all, but fourth stucks 'cause this isn`t baseball//
head straight on the curve, then your journey nears an end
the road ceases to bend, and rises to an unknown descent
Attempt a peer at it's peak, and you'll slip free of the ground
And amazingly get closer to the peak, as you fall down
step up, remove my outershell, in-spoken well yo// new sorrows tomorrow
hopin' for "hellos"// you borrow that knew sorrow, i've stalled// restarts
slow the pace for achievements at the end of upward falls//
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Old 12-18-03, 05:35 PM   #2
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thought this was ok, didnt really jump out at me....but some nice lines in there and it flowed well .....i would work on the miltis though....structure was nice...helped keep the flow.....liked the concept...yeah quite good man...pZ.....keep at it....
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Old 12-18-03, 07:01 PM   #3
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.
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Old 12-19-03, 09:25 PM   #4
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Old 12-19-03, 10:08 PM   #5
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Old 12-19-03, 10:43 PM   #6
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Hmm, yes kids, we call that a free post....

Anyways, i liked the flow of it and a good idea....like Deva said work on your multis a lil
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