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1."entro"by.Scot_free
2."corrupted Visions"by.Mc-Uski
3."I fucked up!"by.YJ


Sorry for not putting this on da other two.





What do i know a bout FAMILY LIFE , nothing but FAMILY FIGHTS,
When every thing you do is wrong and INSANITYS RIGHT,
It's my REALITY the whole fuckin world is MAD AT ME,
For shit i didn't even do, something just so SAD TO SEE
All you hear is a vulgarity SYMPHONY, i aint searchin for SYMPATHY,
But i need to smoke a 20 bag of weed just for life to make SENSE TO ME,
Contemplated on ending it all but thought what would that PROVE,
No one gives a shit bout another teen found dead in the NEWS,
Livin my life but it's so LONELY, no mother to CONSOLE ME,
Just a pyscho fuckin father who needs a weapon ta CONTROL ME,
So much TENSION, i'd have none if it weren't for negative ATTENTION,
Sick of puttin holes through the walls just to get rid of Excpected AGRESSION,
I know i'm headed down the wrong PATH feels like my last breath won't LAST,
My life's a fuckin time bomb and the time is going by too FAST,
I rap to release some PAIN and keep me from going INSANE,
Sometimes it feels like its too late, feels like Life's a GAME,


(Chorus) 2X If You Feel What I Feel Help Me Cry These Tears,
I You Hear What I Hear Help Me Confront These Fears,
If You See What I See Help Me Stop These Stares,
Take A Knife To Your Wrist and Help End My Years,

OVERWHELMED WIT SADNESS, In A REALM OF MADNESS,
Just One Day Away From Being Able To HELM MY HAVOC,
How Loud Can ACTIONS SPEAK,If The REACTIONS MEEK,
Forgetting About All My Problems Yet The SATISFACTIONS WEAK,
Anger AIMED Like EXPLOSIVES,Brain INSANE From PYSCHOSIS,
Huge Grin On My Face Thinking About Being In PAIN WIT MY THROAT SLIT,
Friends BLINDED WITH LIES,As I Hide BEHIND A DISGUISE,
The Way I See It You Live Life Fast With No TIME FOR GOODBYES,
Contemplating On GIANT SCHEMES,Nobody To Hear My SILENTS SCREAMS,
Fuck It Mind As Well Make A Reality Out Of All My VIOLENT DREAMS,
All my Hatred Just BREWS INSIDE, Until I Finally Commit SUICIDE,
Should I live or Should I Die Fuck it i'll Let the TOOL DECIDE,....





What yall think homies ? I need some feedback!

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love your expression and wordusage delivery and image relay
hot all the way through and poetic stanze for line

i quite liked the feel of this...but whats with the capitals????....showed some nice vocab in this and created some nice imagery....the hook worked well i thought... as a whole pretty good drop...i liked it....keep at em'...pZ

..I truly enjoyed your 'outstnding' word play..but what is up with the 'CAPS???.. no need for you to write in caps to deliver the message...if message is there people will understand...nice work..

I like the way you put it in caps. It's a new idea. Good drop. Easy to read.

wow, yeah that was deep, some of the lines lead me to think more than i guess i should have..i loved that line about your father needing a weapon to control you..that was the backbone of your piece, when i read the first few lines i thought it was gonna be an over-played topic but through reading on you proved me wrong..i really enjoyed this piece as it not only scratched the surface, it gave me a real insight to what you feel. Emotion was right there...