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Old 12-24-03, 11:05 PM   #1
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Aryan Occupation

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The chemical plan:

Tick tock, this is a anotha drop that makes time stop/
So I claim my membership to da hip hop, growin like a cash crop/
no slaves to work for this bloody past, so hard to mop/
Cant clean the stains of the cockasian, whippin da pavement/
Superiority is the arrangement so don't get fooled by inocence/
this aryan brotherhood always been up to no good till da present/
so many sentences tha make no sense like da amendments/
only applying to da chosen race, ignoring our presence/
fishy smell, it be a pestilance of pure evil tha has no fury./
just like a jury, sentence yall ta death by lethal inject/
spit a gum and slap it away like mr. perfect in this close circuit/
i realize dat our existance is worthless like fake pearl necklace/
thats why south central l.a bred the generation with a menace/
the flow is short and intence in this city were times is tence/
i'm out with a shout to da devil, play dat treble, do you resemble/
the reality in our temple, die anotha day like bond gettn away/
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Old 12-24-03, 11:25 PM   #2
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.
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Old 12-25-03, 03:24 AM   #3
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this was ok.. i didn't like it thats much,, but keep at it dawg. you will get better, just takes time.

You need to post 3 links to 3 different battle that you have read other wise this would get closed.!


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Old 12-25-03, 06:27 AM   #4
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Ok man...

You have VERY simple rhymes, this isnt bad, but you need to read some other people open mics... try something by sand, or g hod... or me ;-)

anyways, try to rhyme the words in a way that wouldnt be expected!

nice peice tho, keep writing...
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