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Old 12-30-03, 02:33 AM   #1
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Old 12-30-03, 02:39 AM   #2
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You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.

This was ok.....but your structure needs some work though....dont put it in paragraph form like that, put it line on top of line cause in paragraph form it throws the flow off and makes it harder to read for some people....you had some alright vocab....multies could be better....but keep at it.
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Old 12-30-03, 07:42 AM   #3
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average drop...with average content.....flow could have been carried better....but some decent barz in there.....i agree..dont like paragraph...but if you do then ....an ok use of vocab..felt the complexity could have been upped in paces...but not bad at all...pZ
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Old 12-30-03, 09:04 AM   #4
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That Was Average..I Mean The Topic Wasn't All That Good...But What You Need To Do Is Try To Up You're Vocabulary.
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Old 12-30-03, 11:51 AM   #5
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..^ I agree..this was just average..and I don't think it's need for you to CAP every other 'punch'..you need to focus more on working on your vocab's and mutis...peace...
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Old 12-30-03, 05:10 PM   #6
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Don't put it in that form, people will open it and not even read it, they will just click back. You can do better than this. You had some good punches, just put the song together better.
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Old 12-30-03, 05:17 PM   #7
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an average drop, yes. . but if it was really keystyle what do yall expect ? arrite job. keep keyin and you'll get better, just liek anything else you do. not much to say here as it was not really a topic or a usual open mic kinda thing.
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Old 12-30-03, 05:25 PM   #8
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Maybe less than average.. flow was OK... Lyrical content was nothing eye opening at all.. Very basic.. Wordplay and multi's were pretty scarce.. Keep at it tho kiddo I see potential..peace

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