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FormulaMC
Koshafopassova
paddyman

Just imporvised some shit that's on my mind now.... Enjoy

My mother wants me to go to college and be a pro learner
I want to drive expensive cars and be a money earner
My father thinks I should be a fuckn' poker player
but I'm an Emcee slayer, God answer this fucked up prayer
I wanna become big, find a gig at some clown house
Frown at this mouse fitting in her fuckn' blouse
snapping the buttons shut like she ain't got nothing else
Is the only thing that matters is the size of my bra?
I ain't Brittany, give me some fuckn' credit dawg?
I'll hog the mike while I'm up on stage creating rage
page me if you have a craving for some Emcee slaying.
We young bangers will change the way rap is made!
God gave us the gift of verbally angering any cat.
Rat-tat-tat-tat, windows are rattling in the bathroom
A mother's baby is about to fall out of the fuckn' womb
Land on the floor and crack it's fuckn' head open
That's the show that goes on when the mom's high is on
Now the baby is going to be crying when it's mouth is dry
but it won't be crying for milk, just crack, that's wacked
it's a yummy snack the kid needs, when it's crying for more?
a rapper like Echo falls out of the door and onto the floor.

the ideas ill a lil simple but well delivered all and all this wanst great but wasnt no where near shitty you got a m9ind for concept just advance your rhymes to it

Nice man, your good at that shit, impressive keystle,

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Aight you need to evolve the (a) (b) rhyme style. Add some consistency throughout the rhyme too.

thanks for the feedback