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12-23-03, 04:07 PM
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Word For Word P. w/ Camarac
IP: ABE5 5A5C
the wise fool will try to Tempt the Masses w. Empty Glasses the alcholic will share his Bottle dreams w. Whomever Passes Train of Thought leaves the platform, as idea's Fade Away While Crashing into the Wall Of Writer's block .. Where Humans Often Stay Conducting Blades of grass, into a Suicide Symphony Sadistically slashing Wrists Making The Quest for Common Knowledge A Mystery life's like the Blistering Epitome of what i Came to Expect The Head with No Neck Ritualistically Conducting Attempts At Oral Sex i hang my Pictoral Sets in Galleries, so Picture Perfect 1000 words of Worth Couldn't mend or Flex the Broken Cervix Spoken Word Is outdated, replaced with Bling Bling Anthem's But my word's Reflect Brighter futures Than Any Necklace Damnit ! .. the Reckless Manage survival, & yet the Good Die Young? The Ironic Meaning of life To Depict Living As Something That Shouldn't Be Done always figured i Wouldnt Become, just another Circus Act I mean Aside From My Collossal Penis, I'm your Regular Whitebred Nerdy Kat plotting Sturdy Facts into the Labrinth's of Speech, i Callously Preach The Ins And Outs To Music, Sex With Music? .. Pass Me My Drink and then, i'll Collapse Within an alcholic Mass of Fits Ramblin Shit While I Pass A Fist At Pacifist, I Used To Stand Tall With Hip Hop, Now I'm Inevitably Collapsed With It .. so this Glass Of Gin now symbolises me, ready to be downed Forget Spoken Word I See Alcoholism as the future .. follow me now .. the wise fool will try to Tempt the Masses w. Empty Glasses the alcholic will share his Bottle dreams w. Whomever Passes
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12-23-03, 04:11 PM
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IP: 7C9F 2C4F
strong, strong imagery here, some wicked puns, especially the opening line. i think you went a little overboard with the vocab though. still; a great topic, solid hook, good ideas, good work really.
more please. |
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12-23-03, 04:11 PM
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IP: 18B9 857B
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makes it look hella nicer = )
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12-23-03, 04:12 PM
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IP: 36B4 28AF
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...threadid=100836
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=99270 http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...threadid=100354
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12-23-03, 04:20 PM
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\/ pissing me off!!!!
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IP: 5BD4 3E07
completely nice shit all the way through,
some ill vocabulary, i dont now about it being overboard, but the younger peeps might not be able to grasp the concepts. sounds like some jehst shit, from the uk. nice drop peeps
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12-23-03, 04:59 PM
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IP: 88DE A3AE
I agree wit Johnny
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12-23-03, 05:02 PM
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IP: 8167 C251
^ fuck off and reply properly.
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12-23-03, 05:33 PM
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
he gives short replies to be like his penis .. err yeah
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12-23-03, 06:11 PM
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IP: 40E9 F947
Yo, this was a hot joint, specially when i got to da middle. I like dat verse , "Spoken Word Is outdated, replaced with Bling Bling Anthem's But my word's Reflect Brighter futures Than Any Necklace Damnit "(sand 2003).
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12-23-03, 06:22 PM
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IP: ABE5 5A5C
better recocnize .. but the first line was cam, =P
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12-23-03, 06:48 PM
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IP: 3A76 93FE
Quotables:
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Dope meaning and the vocab / imagery / flow was perfect. Quote:
Just a well thought-out line, good work. Overall a well put togethor piece that braught imagery and great delivery and presentation with the flow and vocab. |
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12-23-03, 07:06 PM
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IP: C6CC 5E41
This was dope, I can't tell who's who, So I can't break down eachs part, But both of your lines emerged into one really imaginative/ progressive/ Fluent topic,
You Guys Are FluWent Like Prescribed Medicine. ^^ lol at my tired wordplay.. lol Anywayz, This was a great read, You really pinned this one down as the best open mic up on top of the pages, Great read. Pz |
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12-23-03, 08:23 PM
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IP: 5F2A E1C0
Akusation Pretty much nailed the quotables.
Deff was dope to see sum better heads in open mic. Instead of noob infestation. This piece really hit hard dope imagery, lyrics, content, vocab.. well you know the deal.. n' cam ya right.. the center shit deff makes it look Alot better |
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12-24-03, 09:05 AM
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IP: 9A0F 7D6D
holla
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12-24-03, 07:32 PM
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Sand
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IP: 6387 1717
back ..
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