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Here comes the one who’s acidic and Semitic,
a harsh critic. But you know that I’m terrific. I’m a
crazy Jew, like T ya know I pity tha fool.
I’ll take ya back ta school. Better pray for a miracle.
I’m lyrical, quite satirical in substance and
style. Sit down and take notes for a while.
I’m like a lyrical Nazi. Can’t do nothing but watch me.
Yeah I’m cocky….. but ya know ya can’t stop me.
I’m like Fonzie and you’re Ralph Malph and Potsie.
You’re retarded, a vegetable… your rhymes are questionable.
Think you’re professional? They always said you were “special.”
I’m slim but not shady for tha ladiez in ma Cruiser.
Got more cock than a rooster. You can call me Funky Brewster.
So peep this, loser. Droppin bombs is my specialty.
Ya can’t f--- with me. Got more shaft than Richard Roundtree.
I keep it kosher. I’ll chop ya down like a butcher,
I’m ya pusher. I’ll punk your ass like Ashton Kutcher.
Now that I got yer eyes poppin, jaw droppin
to tha ground………… I’ll see ya in tha next round.

Peace

Kosha fo Passover, tha SuperJew Crew

Looks a battle verse to me..
If so, work on your punches..
& overall writing abilities..

yeah this was nice, you had a good flow 2 it, good lines and a good structure, yea...a self-titled kinda label to it..wasn't really feelin it much when u was tryin put in punchlines and shiit..kinda weak in that area..overall 7/10

Appreciate the input, it's my debut, so I'll try to get it better

that was aight but I think u goin too far wit this jewish thing lol
i mean if u say it every 2nd line it gets annoying but not bad over all