The enemy is staggering
I keep my dagger in between my teeth
leaping into beats
commando-camo-flow
code red signals blow your coordinates
to smithereens
emcees are blueprints for chalk displays
left at the scene
I'm fulla diesel fuel providing the spark
and my fam lurks in the dark
Used to flirt with greatness
now I'm out to steal her heart
I..dare...you to fuck with it
let off one round in my direction
we barb wire every mic when we done flexing
...Penskills the microcosm, fourstar Southpaw rep
decorated name for boot stamping all camps
til brains leak
load up magazines and shoot the source of static automatically
yellow journalists sweat fevers when we swarm
weak bladders tattle warm
but your kamikazi missions, fail to make my forehead glisten
I keep warheads sitting in stand by and-my-service pistol loaded
so nix your D-Day scheme
the game is fucked, already bloated & my check is late
yall cats is leftovers
jockeying for a position on my plate..

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But this was ok....your structure could use some work though..try keeping your lines around the same length so its structured well and so it helps your flow out in your pieces....you had some alright vocab....but overall this was ok...keep at it.

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I thought it was a staggered longated flow, Some stuff didnt rhyme..I liked the visionaries the piece gave...It was overall pretty decent jus some stuff you need to clean up....6.5/10

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