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Old 12-28-03, 08:21 PM   #1
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Damani-da grinch
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tell wot u think of this shit
little on off the top

You think you having me...hold it clown
I got a crew like gravity....we hold shit down
stab u in the ankle....make you roll around(yeah)
Ima reckless mo'fucka....like drunk drivers
Take ya necklace mo'fucka....Im drunk wild
raised no dad jus a mother....Ima punk child
No morals no manners....gonna end up in Parva
hoods and bandanas.....no gucci no Prada
Screwdrivers and hammers....We aint fixing no cars up
This aint no Hears'say....Its pure and simple
Fuck wit katz u gonna popped like a pimple






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Old 12-28-03, 10:00 PM   #2
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you got any better shit hommie. danm I know that was just off the top of your head but I need to see somthing better
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Old 12-28-03, 10:12 PM   #3
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Sounds like Run-DMC, circa 1987. Those were good times, but it's time to update and upgrade, Mr. Katz. Also: drunk drivers suck.
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Old 12-28-03, 10:21 PM   #4
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I agree with the above 2 posts... You really need to elevate man. There is no complexity to your form... Flow is futile... it's like you trying to battle your way out of a paper bag... but can't because you aint got no punchiness to it. Nowadays people looked to be entertained, educated and / or enlightened by a piece... this did neither for me. It sounds more like you were in a rap battle that you were losing.

So reallly, though this may sound like an attack... it's really not. I suggest you maybe attempting due some Topical stuff to build that creative side of your game.

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You think you having me...hold it clown
I got a crew like gravity....we hold shit down

Worst Line:
stab u in the ankle....make you roll around(yeah)
Ima reckless mo'fucka....like drunk drivers

Keep Elevating - Absolutely No Hating!
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Old 12-29-03, 05:26 AM   #5
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aiiight thanx. I think
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Old 12-29-03, 09:15 AM   #6
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firstly its not got long enough barz....just dont flow right....the rhyming needs expanded on and internals would really help this along....jus work on one thing at a time though and youll get it....pZ...jus elevate...
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Old 12-29-03, 09:24 AM   #7
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Its descent, but i was expecting a little more hommie...

Try to use some better vocab in your freestyles dogg.....
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Old 12-29-03, 09:38 AM   #8
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It was okay. It seemed simple. I wasn't really feeln' it. It wasn't terrible though. You had some good punches in there.
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Old 12-29-03, 10:41 AM   #9
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..this was weak..very weak..your content,flow,wordplay..everything seemed out of order..
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