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12-28-03, 08:21 PM | #1 | |
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Damani-da grinch
PaYce Beverin tell wot u think of this shit little on off the top You think you having me...hold it clown I got a crew like gravity....we hold shit down stab u in the ankle....make you roll around(yeah) Ima reckless mo'fucka....like drunk drivers Take ya necklace mo'fucka....Im drunk wild raised no dad jus a mother....Ima punk child No morals no manners....gonna end up in Parva hoods and bandanas.....no gucci no Prada Screwdrivers and hammers....We aint fixing no cars up This aint no Hears'say....Its pure and simple Fuck wit katz u gonna popped like a pimple |
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12-28-03, 10:00 PM | #2 | |
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you got any better shit hommie. danm I know that was just off the top of your head but I need to see somthing better
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12-28-03, 10:12 PM | #3 | |
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Sounds like Run-DMC, circa 1987. Those were good times, but it's time to update and upgrade, Mr. Katz. Also: drunk drivers suck.
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12-28-03, 10:21 PM | #4 | ||
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I agree with the above 2 posts... You really need to elevate man. There is no complexity to your form... Flow is futile... it's like you trying to battle your way out of a paper bag... but can't because you aint got no punchiness to it. Nowadays people looked to be entertained, educated and / or enlightened by a piece... this did neither for me. It sounds more like you were in a rap battle that you were losing.
So reallly, though this may sound like an attack... it's really not. I suggest you maybe attempting due some Topical stuff to build that creative side of your game. Best Line: You think you having me...hold it clown I got a crew like gravity....we hold shit down Worst Line: stab u in the ankle....make you roll around(yeah) Ima reckless mo'fucka....like drunk drivers Keep Elevating - Absolutely No Hating! |
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12-29-03, 05:26 AM | #5 | |
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aiiight thanx. I think
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12-29-03, 09:15 AM | #6 | ||
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firstly its not got long enough barz....just dont flow right....the rhyming needs expanded on and internals would really help this along....jus work on one thing at a time though and youll get it....pZ...jus elevate...
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12-29-03, 09:24 AM | #7 | ||
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Its descent, but i was expecting a little more hommie...
Try to use some better vocab in your freestyles dogg.....
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12-29-03, 09:38 AM | #8 | |
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It was okay. It seemed simple. I wasn't really feeln' it. It wasn't terrible though. You had some good punches in there.
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12-29-03, 10:41 AM | #9 | ||
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..this was weak..very weak..your content,flow,wordplay..everything seemed out of order..
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