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Old 01-02-04, 05:28 AM   #1
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.:wut Tha Fuck:..

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wut tha fuck....how could u do this ta me
how could u be there 1 minute n the next minute jus leave
i loved only u and i gave u my heart
but u played me out and ripped it apart
my minds goin crazy,my emotions are being stirred
and tha fact that u was my first jus makes this shit worse
i don undastand wut went wrong,but tha pain,it jus hurts
i don no wut to do so your name i jus curse
and ta think....all tha shit i ever did for you
paid ya rent, bought u clothes but i was jus bein used
u used me for ass and u used me for money
and tha fucked up thing is....u find this shit funny
cuz when u left me u jus laughed in my face while i cried
and when u walked out that door,my soul it jus died
i never thought....u would hurt me so much
but i was blinded from tha truth by your touch
i showed u love and u showed me nuttin but fake compassion
and i blamed it on tha drugs when u started flippin out n lashin
i should have stayed gone that time u clocked me n we started to
fite
but like an idiot i showed back at your house lata dat same nite
i told u i loved u and apoligized even tho i did nuttin wrong
untill i met u i thought i was strong
and even tho i hate your guts....i wish u werent gone

--a empy bottle of vodka,a knife in my hand
--i wanna still live but wit out u i jus cant....
----the hole rooms spinnin....i cant feel my body nomore
----and i finally feel my pain leaking out wit my blood on tha floor..

peoples i left feed back to
BaaaaaD day(keystyle):~LyRiCaL-JeZuS~
some shit:billy
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Old 01-02-04, 05:29 AM   #2
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FEED BACK......~1~
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Old 01-02-04, 08:25 AM   #3
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This wasnt a bad drop, but its way to basic... Peeps drop stuff like this everyday... Try to use some words that incorporate more than one syllable and drop some hot shit......

Keep dropping them dogg....
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Old 01-02-04, 08:58 AM   #4
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kinda basic..topic quite played but i seen it done so dope before that it brung tears to my eyes..but this could have been improved by adding more emotional lines..and multis and metas..
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Old 01-02-04, 08:59 AM   #5
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Not a bad piece. But its been done before. try finding a new way of expresing your thoughs. Keep evolving.!
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