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12-26-03, 11:38 PM | #1 | |||||||
Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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The Camera Man
IP: 4577 CD9A
My casually tensed steps move in a circle around the scene~
my cold, sweaty palms choke a camera my eyes behind a lens's gleam~ my focus is focused on my life, time progresses the show~ forgetting my current plight i write to continue professing the flow~ in reality heat scorches me but my camera man continues his task~ his actor's unwavering arms rise above his head and shrouds it in a mask~ a ski mask at that the camera man bites his tongue and his heart starts throbbin~ his actor smiles under the mask and pulls a gun from the closet~ the grin isnt captured but to the camera man its no vivid dream~ he knows of it's existance because our camera man here lived the scene~ cut to our actor flipping a cellular device a grizzly voice comes~ from the noise comes a solemn countenance, our actor tells his boys come~ the camera man sits next to the actor on the pissy couch, neck craned to capture the latter beast~ shattered dreams exit the small apartment followed by a lens in search of a masterpiece~ a lonely drop of sweat ventures across the camera man's brow~ crawling out of existance much like our actor his language is foul~ "fuckit son lets waste him before the pig nightcop's night watch"~ the actor and his boys take turns dragging on a light, soft~ screeching tires become the climax, our camera is in hot pursuit~ a middle aged woman exits a creaky church as our actor pops her suit~ his robbers shoot but our actor runs into the church and leave's holey most~ erupts his gun and leaves old folks shakin without the holy ghost~ his purpose lost he runs to the exit, stain glass with sun fire~ he waves the piece around but is met by sireens and a blanket of gunfire~ our camera man bends around the bullets and goes closeup to fool a dud~ our actor gets his first closeup, face down in a pool of blood~ the camera is shut off and the whole world fades~ i return to the present, serving eternity as the underworld's slave~ my recollection of my wrong evaporate in the heat in turn i swell~ with pain hate and rage but for all ages, im gonna burn in hell~ 1luv. |
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12-29-03, 12:14 PM | #2 | |||||||
Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: 399E F0FD
elevation is key...1luv.
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12-29-03, 12:31 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: 8197 FA9C
wow man, nice piece
I don't really know if I got the message straight tho... I felt like the camera kinda was like your dreams or a movie you're describing but yet you come back at reality. My bad if I'm mistakin. But anywayz, the thing I luved most was your flowz and vocab... you just make it all sound so easy. Nice piece, I've been readin ya work and very inspirin dawg. Resp |
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12-30-03, 05:02 PM | #4 | |||||||
Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: F327 71FF
^thanks for following my poems man, ur dedication and replies keep me going, 1luv.
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12-30-03, 06:21 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: C4B5 0CF0
good stuff...it took me a couple of tries to get the message...but after while i got it...you have a nice writing style...i like this...STAY UP
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12-30-03, 11:10 PM | #6 | |||||||
Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: C1DA C961
^much thanks man, elevation is key, 1luv.
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01-01-04, 01:54 PM | #7 | |||||||
Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: 4577 CD9A
elevation is key, 1luv.
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01-01-04, 02:08 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: 11EB CE5D
that was hot shit.keep it up.
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01-02-04, 02:10 PM | #9 | |||||||
Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: 4577 CD9A
^thank you, elevation is key, 1luv.
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01-03-04, 06:49 PM | #10 | |||||||
Str8 From CopKilla Queens
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IP: 399E F0FD
normally i would elt this die but i think it deserves one more up at least, 1luv.
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