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Old 01-07-04, 01:52 PM   #1
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seriousness again

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A bartender goes to jail 4 giving a customer alcohol if the drunk gets in a wreck/
Thousands of people are giving murder plots from CNN so why hasn’t Ted Kopel been arrested Yet?/
Its so easy to blame our behavior on our parents different Views/
But they work on average 40-50 hours a week, we go to school for 30 meaning parents see us at least ten hours less then the TV Do/
Or they’ll say ‘it’s the rap music’ that makes us so damn Bad/
Your worse rap cd are one fourth as violent as your average noon news Telecast/
Getting straight A’s won’t get me known as fast as ruining 20 Bodies wit sawed off Shoties/
I’ve done the research there are less then half the books on Ghandi as the ones on John Gotti/
I laugh when these mouthafuckaz say ‘crime don’t pay’/
America was built on thievery, need proof look no further then Columbus Day/
That kid watched wrestling, saw everything and Learned/
Thought she would be fine threw his sister against a wall and now what he got it from want his soul to Burn well if his does soon it’ll be your Turn/
Violence begets violence it’s a news profit enhancing Cycle/
Friends,parents, and teachers are so I don’t understand how CNN can’t be held liable/

holla at ya;ll damn i need fucking links

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Old 01-07-04, 01:58 PM   #2
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Old 01-07-04, 03:44 PM   #3
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it was pretty good........ you brought up the news and shit as your punches too much...... think of better punches, but you had some really good wordplay in there..... you had multies, but try to think of more.... keep droppn', you'll be dope....... pz
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Old 01-07-04, 04:56 PM   #4
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decent drop... but the flow was off a bit.. with the amount of syllables ya used... i would shorten them.... but good wordplay.. and worded decent... nice work....pZ...jus keep adding..
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Old 01-07-04, 05:03 PM   #5
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meh..decent..flow chopped..didn't really feel the topic...

wanna see mor from ya
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Old 01-08-04, 01:12 PM   #6
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tha other shit is better but its closed so i'm uppin this oh and Echo i didn't have a punchline in there
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Old 01-08-04, 01:23 PM   #7
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..I'll keep it simple..'Very nice'...

''vote on this'
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104991
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Old 01-08-04, 02:04 PM   #8
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ill as drop as usual,like you said half of these so called mc's are wack!
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Old 01-08-04, 02:05 PM   #9
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i re-calculated it, its 90% now
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