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Old 01-04-04, 10:07 AM   #1
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Immortality (emotional torment)

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replied to...True Souldja...Posidan and Deva

This love is a flame that cannot be controlled or tamed/
Like evil the desire can barely stay contained/
Life maimed from depression farmed in the fires of hell/
Dreams haunted by the ghost of lies where you fell/
Blood dried on the floor glaring like the life that reaped/
On this patch of glory, where my mind cannot sleep/
Your soul i keep, in a silver locket, enclosed in a prison/
Till the next time we meet, whether in vision or flesh/
Your prescence hangs in the air stale like the memories/
Long since been fresh, memories now my enemies/
Taunt my heart, tear apart my soul after the depart/
Now i sit alone on the barren wasteland, my head on the block/
Lethal sacrifices sufficient for not, living alone/
Crying in the deadly silence that holds me in its arms/


Emotional drop..not really open mic...or is it?
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Old 01-04-04, 11:10 AM   #2
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Tight Ish Dawg This is An Emotional/Deep Drop...................................Keep it up and u'll Elevate Even Higher
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Old 01-04-04, 03:49 PM   #3
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i think ya really starting to elevate....this piece carried feeling...liked it....ya scheme is getting better.... nice drop....pZ...repp!
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Old 01-04-04, 04:05 PM   #4
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I was feelin this, nice piece, ur seeming to elevate, i felt what you were sayin, nice drop, represent!!
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Old 01-05-04, 01:16 AM   #5
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yo, this shit was tight .
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Old 01-05-04, 01:21 AM   #6
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I have witnessed ya elevation...I remember when you was still just another newbie...but this was hot...I was feelin' the content...it was deep and I felt the emotion...
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Old 01-05-04, 01:22 PM   #7
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yeah, this is what i write..feelings..but i didn't think it was right for open mic..so instead i been droppin quick harsh freestyles..i usually save the emotional side of things for my poetry..but if it sells..who knows..could be seeing more of me...rofl..

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Old 01-05-04, 01:45 PM   #8
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i liked this piece....nice shit...dropped like u meant it n the flow was gud....keep elevatin....pz

will ya giv me some feedback on my piece...before live...thanx!
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