New Millennium Hoes


i hate dese hoes, whos flows seem to go
in the motion of o's and pause emotions for bro's
who's calm blue oceans explode
and cause commotion to blow.

cause they just cant see what they seem to mean,
to the gee they seein, makes him seem to be beamin
cause he be reelin from feelin's.

dats what dese hoes do to me and to you,
aint nothin you can do, but try to be there for boo,
and show her you can be true, dont be too blind by fools,
who act too cool around you, to try to rule your bitch too.

so just follow this track and make sure she dont attack,
by gettin in the sack with a dude behind your back
cause that shit be fucked i know how bad it sucked,
when my hoe was with a bro and the fuckin slut dont know,
just how far the cunt would go, just to flow along my show.

cause the fuckers want your women,
they dont care if they be swimmin,
in your cum when they start rimmin
round her pussy you were fillin.

you wanna make the bitch broke,
and be sure the fucker'll choke,
on the blood thats in his throat,
fuck his corpse and make him bloat,

in some distant desert land, where hell see nothing but sand, thats where you can demand, that he cut off his own hand.

or maybe we can tie him up,
and chuck him fucked up in the back of a truck,
and make the fucker suck his own cock
he used to fuck your missus,
dese bitches just diss us
and think that we just miss this. thinkin we just a witness
in some business that looks suspicious. fuck that.

i fuck a slut and then fuck em up.
bury her ass in long grass and cover it up.

makes me think theres no chicks that dont just wanna suck dicks
or try to get at your chips and make your life fall to bits.

why the fuck they like that? they act and retract
what they say to impact your life
and make them your wife and distract you from strife
that they cause by rubbin backs of your boys.

i miss my hoe but she know she was me lady, had to let her go just so she wouldnt hate me
but i fucked that shit im a dick i lost my chick, cause i couldnt stick to it i wanted my bitch i couldnt quit.

now i fuck the same whore, in her bed or on my floor, even fuck her on all fours, and i make her use her jaw
cause the bitch dont give a shit who she do the dirty with,
but i really liked her tits, so i thought id have to hit,
that sweet ass bumpin, while my meat was thumpin,
and the sheets were jumpin from the heat we were pumpin.

as i fucked her long and fast, while my hand was in a cast
and i had to fuck her ass, just to see if it would pass,

the test that she had rested on the chest of me
to best all of the rest that she had messed with.

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gimme some honest opinions, you know this shit has happened to some of y'all, not just me, so I wanna hear ya feedback...
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needin feedback...
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someone fuckin drop a comment.......
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This was ok i thought....your structure could use some work though in a few places, just touch that up and it will be good....flow in this was ok, it could have been better i thought....use some more multies and make them better....but keep at it.

more multi's?? wtf?? this guy's as wack as his dad's first sexual encounter...

i think you usin a pre-written script there masta c. no hate. just concerned about your well being...

thought this was decent, the scheme was good, but vocab lacked,, too many one syllable words... but it flowed nicely still... yeah decent drop...pZ

Pretty decent

flow---7.5
vocab---7.5
multis----6.5
wordplay---5
structure----5