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Old 01-08-04, 12:43 PM   #1
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Topic: (Drop a rhyme by both of you about how ill your tag team is and spit metaphors and hot similies about your top notch status and why u the illest!)



Two brand-Name Cats that Stay Strapped at our Stage Acts
And maime Wack, Lame Hacks who Say That their Chain's Phat
Plus when we Blaze Wax .. the outcome is Genious Like
I'd free a verse and Defeat The Hype, you took all Week To Write
You Feeble Types pose No Challenge, sound nice but ya Flows Average
.. Pac'll probly Return 'fore you Weak herbs Show Talent ..
The Whole Planet is w. me, stop with those Scripture's Man
Cause when you crowd surfed .. the shit really DID Hit The Fan's
When Gripping A Pad and pen, heads know im Tongue Lashing
.. And cop two copies of my album, incase the One Scratches ..
I could Drop The Wackest i can, put my Tactics In A Pitstop
.. And STILL destroy you, in EVERY Aspect Of Hip Hop ..
The Kids Got originality .. it's proven Fact That Im Nice
While y'all boast of Platinum And Nice, & sound Wack On The Mic
God cant believe i exist .. im a myth Wonder Created
While the Source gave me Six Mics; & Insist I'm Underrated
When Orchestrating a verse .. yeah im Actually Best
My neighbour Called To Ask if id mind Autographing her Chest
You Plantinum 'Vets' hate us, but i see why we Offend You
Cuz women throw thongs on stage 'fore we even arrive at the Venue!
We Loosen Up with Groupie Sluts & Dome on The Floor
Just to get their Head's Nodding 'fore we even Perform
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Old 01-08-04, 12:51 PM   #2
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i thought this was a good piece.... nice style of writin.. thought you got the topic across good... with a well composed verse.... nice n clear..and easy to read.... and at a good level of complexity, without going over board...pZ......
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Old 01-08-04, 12:56 PM   #3
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This kid is blazin just about some up this track/ writing

Flow is off the charts....

Ryming and word sequence is outstanding.... Vocab is nice (Again, this is partly referring to wordchoice)

9/10...

This battle is getting slept on, if ya get a chance could ya drop an honest votes here:

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...ntonio+banderas
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Old 01-08-04, 03:23 PM   #4
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You know what i mean by this...


Typical....!!!


LOL....Nice man, I aint seen you drop here in a while......

Ohh and im gona take it back to HHB and ask u to peep mine....
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Old 01-08-04, 04:55 PM   #5
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"The Hype, you took all Week To Write
You Feeble".....Funny on my open mic I had a similar verse two good minds think a like hmmmm...

"I could Drop The Wackest i can, put my Tactics In A Pitstop
.. And STILL destroy you, in EVERY Aspect Of Hip Hop .."

This line is pure heat....nice hit like you just slapped somone with words...

Overall nice concept ...I see you was lashing out..!!! which I like to do..

One critique don't use wack so much...
Flow scheme was definitly there...

Over all 8/10...Keep rippen heads...Oh and I would have appreaciated if you would have said more on my piece..


Laters....
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Old 01-08-04, 05:32 PM   #6
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you realise the topic was given to me, i didnt choose it? this is probably the most gay topic you can get topically. its bragging rights.
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Old 01-08-04, 05:35 PM   #7
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LOL......
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Old 01-08-04, 05:36 PM   #8
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you realise the topic was given to me, i didnt choose it? this is probably the most gay topic you can get topically. its bragging rights.


Come on...thats like me saying

Hey Baron

Yea

Im gonna post something about you being wack

Cool, I'll son you

Yea, it would be funny


anyways back to topic...
Good drop in all aspects, but i DONT like how they required metas and similies... cause i only really use similies...rarely ever meta

but while the topic was hard, it required a certain style, and that is the challenge
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I thought you said you dont post open mics on here you liar...anyway..whats a similie?..I never knew..antway..this was okay for topic..but you get a A for effort because you did well on the topic..and please explain what the similie is
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i thought it was a good verse.i liked it good flow and metas,it was a good read.keep it up.

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Old 01-08-04, 05:45 PM   #11
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Here is the same line used as a similie and a metafore

Im faster than a bullet

Im fast like a bullet
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Similie is when it goes Like ..

i get down, like syndrome

float like a butterfly, sting like a bee

all that ish = )
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Old 01-08-04, 05:54 PM   #13
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I learned its when you use
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OIC..so like this

Metaphore
Everybody like tires,they take rounds

simile
Everybody tae rounds like a tire


like that^^??

and yes that line was mine Cam =) lol
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Old 01-08-04, 05:59 PM   #15
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Yeah, it is when you say its the same as .. something. Thats what a similie is .. when their alike, when your saying something is like something else ..
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