I replied to Penskillz an' fgee.....

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<<HOOK X2>>
This how the world truely works
you born, you die
an' we'll all soon be dirt
consumed with hurt
thru satan
i was brought unto this earth
to preach unto the masses
an' teach of the coming rapture

how sick is deranged
like
how many kicks does it take
to make putty of someones face
i'm just not sane
drug rot brain
acid flash backs got me pluggin' up graves
tuggin' on fuses so the shit'll detonate
explode like timmothy mcveigh escaped
an' had a second chance
i step an' advance thru sections of black
darkness, slum apartments
roach motels an' someones dog barking
pro'lly at an intruder
a looter, a gangster, a rapist
a psychopath like me
that don't care who's life he taking
my mind's tainted from taking
8 day cocain vacations
the pain's too great i can't take it
so i release the tention
by playin' god with the population
body outlines in chalk on the pavement
society's caving, you can't escape it
it's a fact, you can't change it
we all livin' in amity ville
an' the exit's locked an' gated
we caged in...

<<HOOK X2>>

I once wrote about common sense
now i realize, what's the sense
innocense is only a myth
even the pope sins,
which leads me to believe
hope is pointless
we all fucked in the long run
controled by the long arm
of the corrupt law
a victem of police beatings
malpractice during surgury procedings
i was awake the whole time
i seen my chest cavity bleeding
an' these scars ain't leaving
Love life like it had a meaning
i'm-a jus' live mine
'cause this ain't TV,
you don't get a re-run
ta correct mistakes
it jus' ends an' ya set in graves
follow the light
an' for your wrong doings
you sent to flame
so you best repent your ways
before it's too late

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Didint like this that much..flow was straight..vocab wasnt..I couldnt really tell where you was going with it..like you was just saying random stuff out the blue..I guess I have to peep fgee's first..my advice is to stick to audio..and I dont mean that in a negative way..i give this a 5/10

btw..check out my open mic peice..death of a man

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R.I.P. Bodie

u don't get the meaning... it 'bout the downfall of society... 2nd verse is pretty much true/ my point of view... 1st verse.. is pretty much jus' random shit 'bout how the world is today... i'll peep it./... 1

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^Dawg.. links are no longer needed lol

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Fuck you

i didn't put links... .lol... jus; said who i replied to... is freeposting allowed now or something... shit u could-a atleast responded..

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i thought the flow could have been better... and thought the first verse could have been more specific... the second was better i thought,,, but still the barz dont really match up......all in all an average piece.....pZ....