I Am

Versatile with unbreakable flow you can't file
i stand out not just another emcee on tha pile
tha profile coucasian male,5'9 theres no denial
lackin green but killin rats to go tha extra mile
spittin bile this unhealthy diet got me feelin sick
chicks suckin dick coz i'm lettin'em see tha R kelly flick
Underage and don't spit shit was ma spunk you jus licked
sorry bitch tick cock tick times over i blew a gaskit
delivering lyrics and you assholes can't fade us
so i'll post your hate and collect it from ur anus
u gone tame us nah you circus acts are tha lamest
w-e-s-t i steel mc's lives without tha stainless
fuk painless using chinese water torture to kill
got skill drivin to tha whole without tha drill
i thrill in bed get pussy from ho's without tha bill
pop a pill tha highs of tha charts is where i chill
blood spills coz i pump tha heart of the streets
don't cock heat but givin bitches ma meat feast
devilish i'm scarred with tha mark of the beast
ur lucky atleast a full moon don't give you teeth
want beef i'll call your bitch a cow give her a dial
all tha while people copyin me duplicating my style
not a homicidal dictator but people sayin all heil
i freestyle opponents can't talk there infantile
jus smile an laugh but ma verbal shells gonna blast
on all who ask about what i teach in my class
grab a glass and toast to defeat coz you came last
underground like canibis i also smoke like tha mass
puff puff pass ass like a joint around in tha sac
yakiti yak don't talk back on this track
just another clone you attack but you are wack
ladies find me magnetic so it's your bitch i atrract

Jus showin ma versatilty with a sorta mainstream feel here.

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=96433

Uppin.

Peace

Hmm..
Structure could have been a little better here..
Although you got out your point well..
Not really feeling the ghetto mainstream in it..
Overall it was an ok piece.. 6/10

No Hate

Props

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kinda like that NIke commercial ( I AM )
lol,
anyways... nice... I liked how you brought this
concept into play... your structure was good...
your flow was real nice and you vocab was damn decent...
nice shit man, I enjoy reading your shit.

it was a good piece flow was ight vocab ok multis ight punch ight word play ok over all 5/10

It was a good piece but it kinda lost me in a couple lines, where it broke up. Other than that the flow and concept was good. You might want to try writing about something different next time, not feelin the hoe talk.. anyways keep it up man.

yo west nucca what da fucks up kid i came back to rb a lil while and i see u've elevated keep dat shit up mayne
n holla at me boi if u even remember me

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this was a good peice, you had a good structure very well put across, your vocab was nicely done you had some good thoughts i liked this good piece

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Good, aggresive piece...

Kinda didn't like the goofy multi fest at the end...

But the rest was a good, prop your evil self up type of thing.

Better than the usual "I got's tha bling" type of shit.

A few played concepts (R. Kelly again, people?)...

But pretty good for what it was.

7/10

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you seamed off maybe its cause you been ghost so fucking long which made me pist at you but this wasnt a bad read just not your normal standard of lyrics.

Yea some mainstream type ish wrather than the Underground high vocab shit,jus tryin to show versatilty,Appreciated feed from all.

Peace

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