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Old 01-10-04, 04:12 PM   #1
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It's obvious to see that I ain't in my right mind/
To flow with God-like lyrics when I wirte lines/
My words are heard from the streets to the gutter pipe lines/
Emcees wanna battle me for the chance that they might shine/
These vocab crazed rappers think they've really expanded/
Until the truth hits you square in the face and leave you stranded/
Big words don't mean shit to me/
I just counter act with harder rhymes when it gets to me/
You don't need a fuckin list to see/
That you've been beatin until submission with no wits to plea/
Some say I've grown in a irregular manner/
Cause my name ain't widley known like Jesus or Santa/
I bring plagues murder and other epidemics/
Spew out wars against nations and frown on spiritaul fitness/
The Anit Christ is here spittin a lot of blasphemy/
Controlin minds until they dumb enough to blast for me/
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Old 01-10-04, 04:21 PM   #2
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i felt the shit you were sayin cuz big words dont mean shit to me either
That shit was dope the rhyme scheme was right
check out some of my shit...1

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Old 01-10-04, 04:27 PM   #3
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My words are heard from the streets to the gutter pipe lines/

that was a nice touch...


Big words don't mean shit to me

not a clever line or nothin but truthful...


The Anit Christ is here spittin a lot of blasphemy/
Controlin minds until they dumb enough to blast for me/

that wordplays kinda played...

ok a pretty basic drop an alot of elevation needed but it was decent....
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Old 01-10-04, 04:29 PM   #4
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Thanks for the replies, I'll try to elevate as much as possible. 1
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Old 01-10-04, 04:45 PM   #5
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was an aigh't piece. kept it basic and your rhyme scheme was good. all u really need is a bit more complexity but other then that it was good.
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Old 01-10-04, 05:06 PM   #6
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..decent..
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Old 01-10-04, 05:38 PM   #7
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structure was ok
flow was decent
vocabulary was nice
complexity lacked

was alright for a keystyle though
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