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01-11-04, 01:37 PM | #1 | ||||||
Fuck You, I'm Iller
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Think For Yourself
IP: 843C 2CD1
Was bored... so keyed this up....
Kinda short... May add another verse or two if the response is good Its time to wake up and see the signs of the times Time to rewind... Then fast forward to V.2 of mankind Then society will find that its in need of some help... So just do us all a favor... Start to think for yourself Programmed into roles... indifferent to if we lead or follow Full of sorrow for the fact it seems even our time is borrowed.. Morals swallowed... Eithics erased... Everything still set on race... Expressionless faces... increase of idiocy and trying to keep pace.. Is this how we rate? An imperialistic... power driven state? One run by a man with a reading level of barely 8th grade... Yet we tolerate... Back a bufoon... Hate who we're told to hate... Declining mental states ignorant to how our ethics dissipate... So set a date... the day when you will finally open ya eyes... Grow to dispise... How everyone but us controls our lives Its time to wake up and see the signs of the times Time to rewind... Then fast forward to V.2 of mankind Then society will find that its in need of some help... So just do us all a favor... Start to think for yourself
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01-11-04, 01:41 PM | #2 | ||||||
wanna play doctor????????
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IP: 399E F0FD
nice short piece
flow was on piont... content was decent... all n all this was a pretty stronjg piece a good message being said here.. u should add more onto this |
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01-11-04, 01:43 PM | #3 | ||||||||
peace
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IP: A410 3C88
All in all good read. . I like the message being portrayed and you display it very well. .
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Mad number of Multies here. . I'm not sure if it's a good thing but, in some aspects, it does concrete the meaning of this piece. . F'n Government Nice drop dude. . |
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01-11-04, 01:45 PM | #4 | ||||||
Fuck You, I'm Iller
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IP: 843C 2CD1
Thanks... I suppose I'll throw another verse or two together when I get some time = )
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01-11-04, 01:59 PM | #5 | ||||
Nigga Ima OG.
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IP: 5A0F 8BBE
This was a great short piece.. the hook had a lot of meaning
So did the actual verse.. my favorite line was: Yet we tolerate... Back a bufoon... Hate who we're told to hate... Declining mental states ignorant to how our ethics dissipate... If you could return the favor on my open mic "When my eyes are closed" would be appreciated. Again great piece, stay up
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01-11-04, 02:05 PM | #6 | ||||
Over Weight
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IP: 4577 CD9A
Yepp...alot of multis are in this...
Had a good ol' flow... Was on point with the subject content... no much else to say... PROP-ortions...Is what my open mic is about... please peep...with feedback http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=105870
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01-11-04, 02:43 PM | #7 | ||||||
Fuck You, I'm Iller
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IP: 843C 2CD1
Thanks = )
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01-11-04, 05:01 PM | #8 | ||||||
Fuck You, I'm Iller
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IP: 843C 2CD1
Up?
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01-11-04, 11:28 PM | #9 | |||
Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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IP: EBE3 50E8
Its good that this was kept short and sweet....cause once you get the point across no need beating people over the head with it.. the flow was good yet bad...it had an audio-esque flow to it... so thats good since your doing audio...but comes out kinda bad on text...
Your point was not too direct, but even if it was who cares? If your writing to get a point across do you want to be vague about it? |
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01-12-04, 11:01 AM | #10 | ||||||
Fuck You, I'm Iller
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IP: 843C 2CD1
Good points
Thanks
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01-12-04, 12:11 PM | #11 | |||||||
Veteran
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IP: FF89 3C60
Nice shit, good message...
Kinda a played one (we all know the world sucks), but ya made it yours nicely. Hook was really tight. Vocab, flow, wordplay... This had everything, cept was too short. Add the rest of it and let er rip. 7.5/10
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