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Old 01-11-04, 01:37 PM   #1
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Think For Yourself

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Was bored... so keyed this up....
Kinda short...
May add another verse or two if the response is good

Its time to wake up and see the signs of the times
Time to rewind... Then fast forward to V.2 of mankind
Then society will find that its in need of some help...
So just do us all a favor... Start to think for yourself


Programmed into roles... indifferent to if we lead or follow
Full of sorrow for the fact it seems even our time is borrowed..
Morals swallowed... Eithics erased... Everything still set on race...
Expressionless faces... increase of idiocy and trying to keep pace..
Is this how we rate? An imperialistic... power driven state?
One run by a man with a reading level of barely 8th grade...
Yet we tolerate... Back a bufoon... Hate who we're told to hate...
Declining mental states ignorant to how our ethics dissipate...
So set a date... the day when you will finally open ya eyes...
Grow to dispise... How everyone but us controls our lives

Its time to wake up and see the signs of the times
Time to rewind... Then fast forward to V.2 of mankind
Then society will find that its in need of some help...
So just do us all a favor... Start to think for yourself
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Old 01-11-04, 01:41 PM   #2
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nice short piece

flow was on piont... content was decent...
all n all this was a pretty stronjg piece

a good message being said here.. u should add more onto this
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Old 01-11-04, 01:43 PM   #3
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All in all good read. . I like the message being portrayed and you display it very well. .

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So set a date... the day when you will finally open ya eyes...
Grow to dispise... How everyone but us controls our lives


Mad number of Multies here. . I'm not sure if it's a good thing but, in some aspects, it does concrete the meaning of this piece. . F'n Government

Nice drop dude. .
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Old 01-11-04, 01:45 PM   #4
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Thanks... I suppose I'll throw another verse or two together when I get some time = )
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Old 01-11-04, 01:59 PM   #5
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This was a great short piece.. the hook had a lot of meaning
So did the actual verse.. my favorite line was:
Yet we tolerate... Back a bufoon... Hate who we're told to hate...
Declining mental states ignorant to how our ethics dissipate...

If you could return the favor on my open mic
"When my eyes are closed" would be appreciated.
Again great piece, stay up
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Old 01-11-04, 02:05 PM   #6
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Yepp...alot of multis are in this...
Had a good ol' flow...
Was on point with the subject content...
no much else to say...
PROP-ortions...Is what my open mic is about...
please peep...with feedback
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Old 01-11-04, 02:43 PM   #7
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Thanks = )
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Old 01-11-04, 05:01 PM   #8
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Old 01-11-04, 11:28 PM   #9
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Its good that this was kept short and sweet....cause once you get the point across no need beating people over the head with it.. the flow was good yet bad...it had an audio-esque flow to it... so thats good since your doing audio...but comes out kinda bad on text...

Your point was not too direct, but even if it was who cares? If your writing to get a point across do you want to be vague about it?
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Old 01-12-04, 11:01 AM   #10
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Good points
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Old 01-12-04, 12:11 PM   #11
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Nice shit, good message...

Kinda a played one (we all know the world sucks), but ya made it yours nicely.

Hook was really tight.

Vocab, flow, wordplay...

This had everything, cept was too short.

Add the rest of it and let er rip.

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