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Old 01-12-04, 08:16 AM   #1
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Big EZ Diss...

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I got tired of proving you wrong again 'n again... so, to save useless posts I'mma key a verse up...


Firstly... If you ain't heard of this kid..... its no surprise..
Same goes for his town really..... EZ.. open ya eyes..
I offer feedback on a topic and you drop some weak replies..
Simply put.. I'mma clown you.. Kid.. there ain't no compromise..

My first reply was simple feedback, as said.. not in the way..
Then this fool hits back with bullshit.. the chumps actin' like Reggie Kray..
Frontin' the third most corrupt council in Wales.. its embarrasin'..
A mere mention of Newport.. blah.. it simply pales in comparison..
Match statistics.. its simple.. ya shoddy village is full of cvnts g..
Where a trip to the shop... results in 3hr treks cross-country!..
Further down the very same post you hit hard.. you hit yaself..
Two capitals of a country.. hmmm... and Pac's still got his health..
So the next day I read that shit and drop a straight up reply..
Clown every thing you mentioned... expose all those weak lies..
Til the day after or so.. I get a severe shock to the system..
I'm worried.. this kid seems to be a 'butcher of children'..
Again.. as peeps can see.. I proved you wrong.. my prediction..
I mean.. for real.. Beef with you?! Every posts a contradiction..
Tried attackin' my name... stating that I worshipped others..
When he's in exactly the same boat.. I'd slap your mother..
Called me a herb.. tho when ya record slate was clean..
I dissed.. You spoke of being banned.. shit.. whats this mean?..
Apart from being a loser who hurts himself when he speaks..
You've bitten, swayed, pre-written.. hence been banned for weeks..

Simply put.. ya wack.. dull.. useless.. I could go on..
I could really hit hard... go into detail on ya wrongs..
But nah.. I'll give you a chance to reply.. like verbal pong..
Kid.. start writing.. < 'cos thats the only way you'll come back strong..
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Old 01-12-04, 09:59 AM   #2
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Uppin for some feedback if possible... its like a 15min key roughly..

It ain't as long as it looks...
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Old 01-12-04, 10:11 AM   #3
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lol that was some good shit
good flow
good strucutre
nice multis
i enjoyed it.. because its a diss

8/10
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Old 01-12-04, 10:18 AM   #4
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I enjoy how this at first eye looks like a simple diss verse.
But there is some witty wordplay in there.. nice.
The flow was excellent, which made for a good read..smooth.
Structure was on point..even.. good for a key..
A nice little read, nothin more.. & certainly nothin less.
Maybe some more direct punches, personals are hard on this kid, cause basically.. he's nothin..so you got nothin to base them on.
Though you had some nice lines..the link in the text..worked well for that particular punch.
For a keystyle i'd say this looks very promisin'.. Good job.
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