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Old 01-14-04, 12:35 AM   #1
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Question Rate This 1 To 10 Some Written

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Microphone Genetics/ Scale It 1 To 10
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I Got Microphone Genetics, I Cant Let Go Like An Addict, habbits get Worse kinda Like A Curse spittin Scriptures, In A Verse they Will Not Last From The Spells I Cast, unleash The Wrath.'' bring Forth The Demon'' take Out Your Eyesight For What Your Seein mythologicly Speakin, Dive Into The Deep End n Catch A Mc Creepin, tisket A Tasket another Mc In A Casket!!! From My Futuristic Magik!!! rhymes Majestic, on The Microphone, in The Zone, It Gets Hectic!!! like An Epic virus Spreadin, mcs Headin Toward The Redeyesight your Gonna Die Tonight!!! your Gonna Fly, smoke That Bitch And Get High, we Rock Live When We Ride!!! its The Muther Fukin Redeye!!!!

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Old 01-14-04, 12:38 AM   #2
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I stopped reading after seeing your structure

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Old 01-14-04, 12:44 AM   #3
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3.

structure wack like he said^
as well as the fact that the flow was horribly choppy.

sorry as well
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Old 01-14-04, 01:00 AM   #4
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now scope it

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Old 01-14-04, 03:34 PM   #5
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This was ok.....but since no one will tell you how to fix your structure i will...Dont put it in paragraph form like that, put it line on top of line, because paragraph form makes it harder to read for some people and it throws the flow off in the pieces...but just work on that and keep at it.
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Old 01-14-04, 03:36 PM   #6
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..Structure hurs my eyes...one...<that's the rating...
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Old 01-14-04, 08:36 PM   #7
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hmm Structure is terrible.. but in real shit structure doesnt matter
but since we the viewers have to read it.. FIX IT!!!

Flow was choppy (most likley cause of structure) :P
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