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A Better Place
IP: 06CE 1934
A Better Place
As she took the glass, swallowed a mouthfull
lost in the past, ever so remorsefull the world moves mysteriously, turns beautifully but yet sometimes, ever so tragically circumstances change, carrying joy and pain like winter, when it brings the rain lacked that certain something, that great british finnesse lost in a vast ocean of emptiness kept soldiering on, but one day the mask had to drop brought closer, by each tick of the clock heart beating, till the day emotion caused it to stop now lays shattered, ripped apart sways with pills and water in each hand, no sound eyes well up as her lifeless body, drops to the ground The pain that sarah once enjured through death now cured looks forward to heaven, to start the healing as numbness deadens the feeling R.I.P. ~ Sarah Kirkland 1982 ~ 2002 "See you again one day in heaven"
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^^^this was a nice piece dawg, flow was on point n u cud tell there was meaning behind it, it wasn't great but it was gud! use a bit more vocab and try n be abit more complex......gud read though dawg liked it....
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