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Old 01-12-04, 03:24 PM   #1
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Corupted visions: "life is good now"

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My heart beats, my writes reach, my life cheats, livin on the side streets
Taking the back seat, on the abandoned alley, wondering what can life teach
Broken ties inbetween family lives, hangin on like looses grape vines
So many saved times, resisting the severed rides, so my mind hides

Lengthing crys followed by my mothers sighs, what do we got to hide
When lifes a lie and lifes a crime, your just a mere firefly in gods eyes
I felt like i was going to die, trying to find my self who am I?
How do you explain whats real, when you yourself, are just a big lie

But then you start to relise, life wouled be better if it was minimized
Instead its sized up to many sizes, to remain in the form of my eyes
Untill that day you start to understand, theres no reason to ask how
Cuz' all I gotta say is, "Damn my life is finnaly good now"

I was almost 16 crying my self to sleep
I was hopeless but then my life made a leap
No more bad days, its all about the good now
Nothing left to say, "But life is good now"

Ive counted every minute to this day, every second that i pray
Asking god to take me away, because ive got nothing left to say
But he had other tasks for me in store, so i took his perplexed course
Making like more difficult, following trails that led to my perents divorced

After over 1 year, I can actully say i understand
Somebody enters my life, ill gradully take there hand
For anyone who calls me a pussy, for taking this so hastily
Ide have to dissagree, im the child not knowing defeat

Try to take this leap, cope with a broken family
Or just take a seat, and lets just let ends meet
Knowing the 2 people you love, cant stand eachother
Wouled rather give up time with there sons
...................................to see the one another suffer

Picture this, every day you see the devils face and odd you get along with her
Its the misstress my dad now dates, but i guess the sickness in her did cure
But im done messing with this, so i scream loud
Dont know about you, "but my life is good now"

I was almost 16 crying my self to sleep
I was hopeless but then my life made a leap
No more bad days, its all about the good now
Nothing left to say, "But life is good now"

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...312#post1081312
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...325#post1081325
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...337#post1081337
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Old 01-12-04, 03:29 PM   #2
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wow..you know we don't need links anymore...

i thought the multis in this were out of this world! good concept! really feelin it..so..collab? keep it up!!!!
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Old 01-12-04, 03:35 PM   #3
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lol didnt know that
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Old 01-12-04, 08:28 PM   #4
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lol....but yeah this was pretty good here man....enjoyed the read....you had some good structure in this, some lines were stretched out but you made them flow good with the internals and multies....the flow in this was pretty good, it stayed on point...overall a good drop...keep at it man.
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Old 01-12-04, 10:30 PM   #5
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thanx for the feedback, uppin
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Old 01-13-04, 07:22 PM   #6
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uppin please give feedback
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Old 01-14-04, 07:08 PM   #7
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god damn ppl, give me feedback
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Old 01-14-04, 08:33 PM   #8
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yewa man this was alright i thought.....ya Structure is alright but its Still Needs a Lil work But it was Still Good in some places.....Ya flow was Nicely Done to worked Well With Your Vocab....so yea i enjoyed this read All the Way...so All and all this was Good Shit i Like THe way U Presented it too....PeacE OuT MaN....
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Old 01-15-04, 10:26 AM   #9
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..Sorry..I must've missed this..this was an Ill piece...your story telling is one of a kind...good content...peace..holla back at me~
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Old 01-15-04, 07:20 PM   #10
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thanx man
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