![]() |
|
![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() |
Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio ![]() |
|
![]() |
![]() |
||
Half Lyricist/Half King
|
My Word
IP:
My word is my bond,
Like a fire juss lit Burning eternal words, That are bounce off my lips Nobody knows me enough, To tell me who I am In this game of real life, I never give a damn Keep my head focused, On the prize ahead of me I try to spit honestly, But you people never see The size of the problem, Is larger than ever before My word is my word, I'll take a step and open the door
__________________
<a href="http://http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?p=1194274">Se7eN v.s Long Beach Finest</a> ![]() |
||
![]() |
![]() ![]() |
![]() |
![]() |
||
New to RB
|
IP:
interestin bit...short, but had its highlights...
some rhyme but u didnt harp on it.... emotion showed through stuck to topic... all in all a good piece
__________________
~â€-LiBeRaTe Me!â€-~
CuZ Im PoEtIcAlLy UnStOpPaBlE
Read My Shit & Gimme Respect
![]() ![]() I.J.L. Liberating All From Whack Ass Rhymes
![]() |
||
![]() |
![]() ![]() |
![]() |
![]() |
||
Half Lyricist/Half King
|
IP:
thanx
__________________
<a href="http://http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?p=1194274">Se7eN v.s Long Beach Finest</a> ![]() |
||
![]() |
![]() ![]() |
![]() |
![]() |
||
Half Lyricist/Half King
|
IP:
uppin for my piece here, please give me feedback
__________________
<a href="http://http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?p=1194274">Se7eN v.s Long Beach Finest</a> ![]() |
||
![]() |
![]() ![]() |
![]() |
![]() |
||
Middle Weight
|
IP:
I didnt like the piece, it seemed like just ramblin. It sounded like it was meant to mean sumtin but i have no idea wat. I do get some lines, about the "words are bonds", those i completely understand. The lines were you talk about other things, thats where i get lost. You need some work on this poem, it seems to have a deep message(not sure wat it is) but i think it does, make it longer. The vocab was very simple, used. Strange format, sumtimes almost rhyming, sometimes not rhyming at all. structure is good. I felt no emotion at all, just like talkin. well thats just my opinion, keep workin man. g luck'
__________________
![]() Po'Ethics.
|
||
![]() ![]() |
![]() |
Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
Display Modes | |
|
|