Why do you rebel like pagans
tellin yourself contrary to what your souls sayin
sellin yourself to evis epitimy
same as payin homage 2 satan
claim 2 b insane and dependant
when inside you know yourself
why teach lies 2 decendants
keepin the truth in along with the riches
till god need'nt your witness or prayor
devoted your life to pleasure
left dead in hells deepest lair
how many layers are there in the example
its unusual cuz you got plenty time ample
when you fail your spirits ugly
and crime you resemble
defiance your dyin
screamin for help
but angels change course when their flyin
your mouth is filthy
spittin mangled rhymes without bitin or tryin
what makes you think your gonna survive
when you never stare deep in your mind
but not to mistake your eyes for insight
look inside and you'll find yourself

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Ya shit is no competition like 'trucker hats' against some 'fitteds'
nigga I'll fade u away like J's on the ballin court in a 'arcura' wit 'tinteds' -mindkontrol

none yall niggas wanna see me...

nice drop, the structure was pretty good, the flow was good, the vocab was decent, basically um, just work on uppin your vocab, well you could make lines a little longer but it's a poem so it's aight. keep droppin and you'll elevate, overall catchy read

peace

thanks krem, glad you enjoyed.

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Ya shit is no competition like 'trucker hats' against some 'fitteds'
nigga I'll fade u away like J's on the ballin court in a 'arcura' wit 'tinteds' -mindkontrol

none yall niggas wanna see me...