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Verbal Illness, Medicinal Healing
IP: 7A38 2D7B
Verbal Illness, Medicinal Healing
I'm the bringer of common cold, Lukemia and blood clots, Female; now something doesn't quite join up the lyrical dots, Hearing gunshots, a cancer of the brain with one aim to turn insane, Shatter your limbs with my patter, splatter you lying lame, Deaf, dumb and blind, like a virus in the mind, Only femcee to make your intestine unwind, A rare find; when placed faced down on the operating table, I'm missing three vital organs, but my blood pressure's still stable! I cut corners in battle so I rattle those points up quicker, Lines flicker straight to your liver quicker than a litre of liqour, Sicker than influenza , or chronic lung disease, I spit bullets at close range; bow down on your knees, Bronchitis, my sister had a disease just like this, Sept' the doctor said something different... Hepititus, A or B? Or was it conjunctivitus? I don't remember, does that mean i have Alzeimers? Got a verruca on my eye, I spy a wart of some sort, Used to have night vision, now i only see it in short, Strapped to a ventilator, told my Mom I'd see her later, Bitch never came back to see me, guess thats why I'm a hater, Highly contagus..on a scale no one can gauge us, This is one for Corrupted Visionz, more illness coming up! Last edited by FanTa ZeE : 01-18-04 at 12:47 PM. |
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IP: DF7B C8F7
that was a good verse
you had some whitty lines i liked this punch best Lines flicker straight to your liver quicker than a litre of liqour, http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=107421 |
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IP: B341 2263
pretty nice by my standards.. sum nice lines that made me laugh :P keep uppin. peep my new piece please.
"Hepititus, A or B? Or was it conjunctivitus? I don't remember, does that mean i have Alzeimers?" = my fav line.. for sum reason lol. |
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IP: 7A38 2D7B
yeah, that was my fave line too...lol it just popped into my head and i was like, shit, this is dope for me! LOL, i actually think i'm getting better! LMAO
keep da compliments coming! By the way, i used to be called Liba Dee, this name is a more common alias and a new start for me...keep peepin the shyt! |
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IP: 7A38 2D7B
Uppin this shyt!
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IP: 7A38 2D7B
can i get some more replies?
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Banned: Spamming
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IP: 399E F0FD
..Nice..I didn't reconize the name at first...until I went into crew chat..anywas..this was decent..it flowed well..I thought the content was lacking a little..but..other than that..it's alright...
~Click on free stuff! |
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IP: DD10 0DFF
yeah this was pretty good.....made a good read....structure was pretty good.....you had some good flow in this, it was pretty smooth i thought....had some good vocab in there....the content was alright i thought....but overall this was pretty good, enjoyed the read....keep at it.
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IP: 967B 2E06
good flow , good structure , vocab was good..keep writin.. Peace
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IP: 7A38 2D7B
Thanks
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