Every time I feel your touch I get chills up my spine…
I cant get you out of my head cause you fill up my mind…
Just the thought of you lights up my day in its darkest hours…
Cause you’re just so beautiful like you’re a arch less flower…
And my heart just showers all my love that I have for you…
Cause I adore you and all I want is to just be in your view…
Looking back into your eyes and seeing your inner beauty…
That drew me in cause with just one blink you soothe me…
Making all my pain go away cause you just show the way…
With all of your love that I would never just throw away…

Cause it just happens every time…
I feel your hand softly touch mine…
I just fall deeper in love with you…
Every time my lips just kiss you…
Cause it just happens every time…
Your wondering eyes find mine…
I just fall deeper in love with you…
Every time my lips just kiss you…

Every time I see you smile my heart just starts to race…
Cause with just one smile you to take me to a part of grace…
By seeing your lips arch so beautifully underneath the stars…
As you fall asleep in my arms with love you sheath my heart…
Cause no love is as healing as yours and its just so pure…
My love grows for you everyday, this isn’t lust no more…
Because every time I see you smile my love for you grows…
Cause your too close and there’s nothing more true though…
Cause there’s nothing like seeing you smile knowing your happy…
As your going to wrap me in your arms, with love you trap me…

Cause it just happens every time…
I feel your hand softly touch mine…
I just fall deeper in love with you…
Every time my lips just kiss you…
Cause it just happens every time…
Your wondering eyes find mine…
I just fall deeper in love with you…
Every time my lips just kiss you…

Every time I look deep into your eyes I just get butterflies…
And my stutter tries to not look like a fool and mutter rhymes…
Making my heart flutter high like the angels in the clouds…
I just wanna spin and shout cause my heart you win no doubt…
There’s just so much you can say to me with those eyes…
Like I love you or hold me tight, looks like I chose wise…
Because when I look at you all I see a angel in my sight…
You shine bright as your eyes light cause your mine right?…
Forever and always you will and this love will never die…
Cause when I see you it just happens to me every time…

thought this was quite good..... got the feeling into it... some nice multis, that ran smoothly... the flow was ok, but some times the rhyme could have been carried further..... but all in all prety good,,,you sad man..lol.....pZ

you are really good at this......strusture was really good and you had some good multies.......flow was good and so was chorus.......keep up......

credz is a softy...haha

this was really good, i felt some simple rhymes but the emotion was consistant and your view of love. very usual topic but you wrote on it well. the chorus was okie...but to the point....i enjoyed ths...if you could hit something up in my sig thanks

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Nice, good emotion putted in here, .. some good usage of vocab, ..& flow was steady & on point, .. tho i would recommend u to write outsite that box, .. feel free to be different, ..enjoyed this piece, ..keep up the good work man = )

Very nice piece, I like the topic, and it was kept on focus throughout the whole thing,
Flowed nicely and had a good structure, some nice multi usage.. Very decent drop.
Id give it a 8.5/10. Keep droppin bro.

very dope piece..great structure..good simple vocab..maybe you are a 'softy'..LOL~~~~

lol...thanks for the feedback so far, keep the feedback coming in, its much appreciated, Thanks.

this was nice, why the change off Masta C?
Structure was dope, hook was nice
Flow was real smooth.. coo concept
softy :P
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good ish..............your elevatin bro, this drop kept me readin, solid drop...........you have good wordplay, this drop was deep, a nyce rhyme scheme.....throwin up sum hott multis, you stayed on topic.....tha hook was aight..........tha only things i notice that you could correct is tha hook.....and redundancy....i undastand that tha gurls eyes are dope....but you mentioned them in about half your bars and you mentioned holding her alot too............but thats just my opinion, nyce drop playboy, i expect to see more of this in tha future, peace, 1

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Hey Thanks For The Feedback So Far, Keep The Feedback Coming In, Its Much Appreciated, Thanks.

this was good man...i liked this read quite enjoyable.....ya flow is good like always and ya structure is good i always like your Writen style....You are the Multi king man every Line i could spot ya multis Makes it really Enjoyable.....so another Good piece man

Hey Thanks For The Feedback, Keep The Feedback Coming In, Its Much Appreciated, Thanks.

..I read this before..it was a terrific read then..and it is a terrifice read now...peace...SOFTY...

lol so good you had to peep it twice haha.