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Old 01-18-04, 01:35 PM   #1
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Promises

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He promised he would neva leave me
2day Im alone
Promises broken
Scattered like dust in the wind
My heart aches with pain and emptiness
Sorrow and tears fill my eyes
They come like rain, on a hot summers night
My soul still intact, will it pull me through?
Do I have the strength
to grow,
to move on,
to forgice?
TOday is not that day
Tomrrowit could be a possibility
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Old 01-21-04, 03:18 PM   #2
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It had some pretty good emotion, we've all been in that place atleat once in our lives, even though it didn't rhyme, it still kept me reading, nice drop tho overall, try to make it a little longer, but i dunno, it's hard when shit like that happens
keep droppin

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Old 01-22-04, 07:58 PM   #3
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Good Piece, simple, but had some good emotion..up your vocab..it might help...for text anyways...not audio..anyways...keep at it...

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Old 01-23-04, 06:54 AM   #4
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very poetic, alround it was a nice piece
a bit short though
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