aiyo, my heart aches through all these scarred cracks an breaks/
my hearts in place, but still they seem to make me feel misplaced/
still i wonder who i can turn to face and in who i can place faith/
i feel tha need for a serious decision to take place/
but tha sideeffects kickin in at a serious pace in numerous ways/
i turned to celebrate, but out shines your rediculous traits/
we had shit to do, i couldnt just focus my full attention on you/
with all in sight tha only one who went missin was you/
sent a message sayin we needed to be home by 2, oh some guy grabbed you?/
why tha fuck should i even beleive thats true, im experienced in this game/
dont try to play me while your still just new, tha first time i said bye i didnt
really mean it/
My emotions made me real leanient, bitch but for real, fuck you an this time i do really
mean it/

- 1d

Yo, I liked this one. The structure was good, and your I like your use of words. I could really see where you were commin' from when I read this. Somthing other people would relate ta too. Anyways keep it up.

thanks sin... any more feedback?

- 1d

sounds like you got some deep emotions for this girl... I feel you right their mang... last year I had some issues with a women I've been with since high-school... I've wrote a lot of that type of shit. Really helps you vent, and put your emotions and thoughts down on paper.

So I can relate to this... the structure was good, and considering the subject matter it was an all around good piece. Wasn't really any creative or outstanding in there, but the emotion was the best part.'

peep one of my drops mang and stay up

`100

Was this supposed to be off that Diplomats song I really mean it?

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