[intro]
We’ve been through it all, who woulda thought….1 year….. would make so much difference?

[Emotion]
Treacherous P, I came into the net game without a rule…
I was constantly called a fool, i was just tryin to be cool…
Listening to canibus- ...You know just tryin to be inspired…
Little did i care for my life outside the internet, Forget…
That my emotions were fit to burst, the cool heads I met…
In my early stages on the sight I was kind of an imposter…
Tryin real hard to get my place up on a dope net roster…
It's not that i didn’t have a life; it just wasn’t what i wanted…
I shunted myself from my friends Rb became haunted…
Started listening to Aesop rock that’s when it finally hit me…
There's more to writing rhymes then dissin sum1 that bit me…
I elivated as a person, started makin poems and open mics…
At school I no longer got into fights, i was just that kid…
With his headphones on scribbling down shit on paper…
Thats why I smile when newbs say "I'm gunner rape ya"…

[Rhytmic]
Nearly a year to the day I wanted my rhymes on display...
n' I contemplated the type of image - i wanted to portray...
My mind was in decay I desperately needed to vent...
Emotions with the intent on releasing my mental torment...
Back in the day, deepened lament n' lucid insane...
I used to my brain to enter the mysterious net game...
Suffering writers block strain feelin' I just couldn’t explain...
But months past I began to arcane the knowledge-...
Of rhyme evident in every single one of my lines...
I've grown into someone with a notional mind...
n' I've indulged Rb to irrational n' insane combined...
I showed my skillz n' the beast encaged behind...
I've matured through all the emotion pain i've endured...
Rest assured I'ma keep using these skillz I've acquired...
n' continue wit my "Quest To Be Inspired"...

My original copy:

..Very nice...both flow was quite good...both had some good wordplay..I personally enjoyed the first verse a little more..and RT..you write like achild~~LOL~~~peace~

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dope, you had the best verse but they were without question both good.

Honestly, no beef but i thought these verses were below par, i dont know how long you guys been rapping but ya need to up your skillz, I thought the second verse was better than the 1st due to complexity and vocab.

maybe try and use a little more imagery, some mets maybe.....

pz

i thought htis was pretty average, ive seen better from both of you, outta the 2, rythmic had the better, constructed better with a smoother flow, emotion, thought your verse fell in places with the flow and the rhyming could have been carried further,...so... average....

yeah it was a qucikee kinda thing we did it real quickmmm but anyways...uppin

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seriously, up this shit..l0l.

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