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Checkin In Ill Spit First......................
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Yo Look At This Herb Who Thinks Hes Tight Like 50 Cents/
He Thinks He Can Rap But This Guy Aint Really Makin Sense//
Haha This Is Week This Shit Isnt Even Intense,u A Reject/
Ur Gettin Merked So Bad U Should Just Hang Your Self Or Snap Ya Neck//
I Thought It Would Be Over In A Couple Days But Now I Think It''ll Only Take A Couple Secs/(seconds)
I Got A Losin Record But Man Its Like This Guys A 5 Year Old Kid Battlelin A Vet//
U Say You Name Is This Guy Name Outcome/
But Ur Lines Are Wack I Think You Need To Get Outsome//
Just Say It''my Name Is Outcome Im A Newb But Im Still Wack Son''/
By The Time This Battles Over Its 5 Votes To None//

Done:

Hurry Up Spit Dude.................checkin Then Spit Peace

Checkin in, sorry for tha lateness, but i was off asleep

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T,I like you already, you admit your a Krakka that shows intigrity/
Sucking at rap wont turn you black son saddly thats reality/
Become my first casualty to pull a matrix revealin there own mortality/
I wonderd why you had a hole n ya head then it clicked, homosexuality/
Kraks so under my influence even his computers ready to follow me/
He's a local crack head, with no dick, feenin so much hes actin bitch/
Fuck your whole net existence,switch sites, before i admit you have syphlis/
thats the only way youll be ill and doctors can cure that sickness/

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my vote goes to Outcome.reason:coz Krakka T waz jst to simple.sorry bud
voteutcome

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"THE FRANCHISE"

Krakka -this verse needed more punches -just wasn't feelin' it.

Yo Look At This Herb Who Thinks Hes Tight Like 50 Cents/
He Thinks He Can Rap But This Guy Aint Really Makin Sense//
^not a strong opener, no punch: 3/10

Haha This Is Week This Shit Isnt Even Intense,u A Reject/
Ur Gettin Merked So Bad U Should Just Hang Your Self Or Snap Ya Neck//
^mostly filler, no punches: 4/10

I Thought It Would Be Over In A Couple Days But Now I Think It''ll Only Take A Couple Secs/(seconds)
I Got A Losin Record But Man Its Like This Guys A 5 Year Old Kid Battlelin A Vet//
^structure and flow was WAY off here: 3/10

U Say You Name Is This Guy Name Outcome/
But Ur Lines Are Wack I Think You Need To Get Outsome//
Outsome? no, doesn't even make sense, but attempted a personal: 3/10

Just Say It''my Name Is Outcome Im A Newb But Im Still Wack Son''/
By The Time This Battles Over Its 5 Votes To None//
^wrong, and no punches in tha closer -nothing about this bar or verse was hard, and you had almost no punches/ snaps or personals: 3/10

Outcome:

T,I like you already, you admit your a Krakka that shows intigrity/
Sucking at rap wont turn you black son saddly thats reality/
^ok opener: 5/10

Become my first casualty to pull a matrix revealin there own mortality/
I wonderd why you had a hole n ya head then it clicked, homosexuality/
^ok, decent: 6/10

Kraks so under my influence even his computers ready to follow me/
He's a local crack head, with no dick, feenin so much hes actin bitch/
^lol, hice wordplay: 6/10

Fuck your whole net existence,switch sites, before i admit you have syphlis/
thats the only way youll be ill and doctors can cure that sickness/
^lil played, but still funny, decent close. Coulda been a stronger verse, but: 6/10

Krakka: 16/50 32% (not)ill: Read up on some good battles, elevate your flows wit' wordplay and punches.

Outcome: 23/40 57.5% ill -still need some work, but not TOO bad a verse. (only 8 lines too, so it was a lil short)

Vote: Outcome

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=103166
Return the favor and hit this wit' an honest vote.

Outcome came with more complexity..
Hence vocabulairy & overall writing skill.
Still doesnt make a verse good though, Both elevate.
Work on punches & creativity..apply wit & comedy..
Krakka was far to simplistic..Hardly enjoyable,
To be quite honest.. & work on your structure..
Its all over the place, but overall Outcome takes it,
With a overall better battles verse (& punches..)

vote Outcome

He Gets Dqed Tho Because The Rule Was He Has To Spit 10 Lines
So He Either Gets Dqed Or The Battle Should Be Closed
He Did Not Follow The Rules

Mods He Should Be Dq Ed
He Did Not Follow The Rules..........

Can Some One Close This
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Some One Close This Battle Rules Are Rules No Matter What......