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Old 01-21-04, 11:25 AM   #1
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Soft Focus: The Weathers Art

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Winter
A dark silent walk home I glance to see the beautiful trees glow
Remarkable the vision after the storm laid a blanket of snow
Trapped in this peace of mind of the soft focus of the evils illusion
Sparkling drops of snow easing my mind putting rest to confusion
It's contagious I could stare at the mysterious eye candy all night
An never feel I’ve had enough, It helps my ego..believe I’m alright
Who would have thought just a walk could be a helpful therapist
Take away the evil stop you from going and slitting your wrist
Eyes feel focused staring at how the ecosystem actually works
The winter is so precious maybe it's because of Jesus’ birth

Spring
The year is changing like the baby who was born in December
Gods crying rain to wash up snow another season to remember
Paralyzing hate with waterfall of lust that begins to prove love
You sit and hear the angels play with the thunder from above
Puddles left in the ground from the rain storm...nights perfection
You stare in the dew of the damp leaves to see your reflection
Imperishable the items on the trees that begin to slowly sprout
The lakes begin to flow hard and you see fishermen netting trout
This season is another blessing in disguise from powerful angels
We pray to the keeper of earth to show we're forever thankful

Summer
Infatuated by the power from the sun and the bliss handed
Down in rays letting flowers bloom an migrated birds be landed
Animals awake from hibernation morning you hear birds chirping
Look out side at the surroundings and see every things working
From the smallest insect to the largest bear summers majestic
With a symphony of sounds in the morning leaving us going hectic
Wake up a little early so you see the sun go down feel the sunset
Open yours eye like flowers see summer is beautiful...no regrets
Heating up the water so our race can swim and enjoy pleasure
Another season change that was opened up golden treasure

Fall
The temperature starts to fall similar to the leaves on the trees
See the animals packing up an birds getting ready to be diseased
Flowers being drowned in rain rivers start to have a light ice
A sheet so thin but sets the mood just right an for know price
Covered in leaves and mud from a little river on your property
You can tell the seasons taken to you by the rain fallen promptly
Trust this season will come back with more stormy weather
Rain drenching ya close fog staling your journy..anything better?
This is special in its own little way everything is a young waterfall
Maybe this is actually why they declare this fallen season...fall

The Art
Seasons can't cure the blind but they help them feel there way
Give a right purpose similar to thoughts on why Christians pray
Showing different pictures from rivers to snow on the trees
Incredible it's so blissful could take away the air you breath
Take a glance around you and feel the mystical painting it draws
Deserves an applause for many ways it leaves your eyes in awes
Doesn't use a paint brush a pad it simply uses it's surroundings
Tangles vines around trees leaving certain remarkable findings
This is the portrait of life a daily picture that'll never depart
Helps your insight rain snow fog mist all a beautiful art

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Old 01-21-04, 12:48 PM   #2
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that was a prity good piece, i liked the way u described the different seasons and managed too keep it from being boring
"It's contagious I could stare at the mysterious eye candy all night
An never feel I’ve had enough, It helps my ego..believe I’m alright"
some people might think thats a bit soppy but i know how u feel , when i have a lot on my mind and i have a beer at night and there are lots of stars in the sky its relaxing to look at them and helps me think.

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Old 01-21-04, 07:58 PM   #3
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Old 01-22-04, 06:10 PM   #4
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Old 01-22-04, 06:13 PM   #5
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i thought this was pretty good, even tho i did the exact samesorta piece, months ago... but you took a slightly different angle to me.... quite interesting and different from some drops.... i liked it, and not just cos ive used it..lol..... return the favour on my latest...
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Old 01-23-04, 08:30 AM   #6
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thanks...don't sleep...
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Old 01-23-04, 10:16 AM   #7
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..I read this yesterday..i don't know why I didn't leave a feedback??....anyway..this was very good..your imagery was excellent..your wordplay was also great...i personally like the fall...
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Old 01-23-04, 05:26 PM   #8
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thanks a lot...thats apreciated
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Old 01-24-04, 12:10 PM   #9
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