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Old 01-25-04, 09:05 PM   #1
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Who knew my lyrics would cause so many issues/
If I knew you bitches were so sensitive I woulda bought you some tissues/
People come to me and say im manically insane/
Muthafuckers ask me why I take the lords name in Vain/
Im sick and tired of gripping bitches and pussys/
If you tricks don't fuckin like it sue me/
But you fuckers better watch what you say/
It would be fucked up if I ended your life this way/
Slaughter you,crush you,chop you up,torture you/
Goin after your family next so theres no one left to mourn you/
Im not a bad guy just a little insane/
I am willing to die for fame/
Keep fags and queers away from me permanently/
If you don't i'll just exterminate them most certainly/
Im not a guy to be fucked with so watch what you do/
Because in the end i'll skull fuck you too/

Im in a very fucked up mood so leave some feedback yo

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Old 01-25-04, 09:12 PM   #2
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You need medical help...well, if not medical help, the Wackness Emergency Centers help...Haha, just playing...this was below average with the multies and the metaphors...Your structure is pretty bad and your flow was sketchy...You rhymes "insane" twice...time to expand vocab..

Check out mine... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109651
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Old 01-25-04, 09:32 PM   #3
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I think this was a little messed up, I agree that you could have used better vocab and your flow could have been better. Other than that I thought that you expressed what you were feeling and that's kind of what I feel that freestylin is all about.
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