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Old 01-22-04, 11:59 AM   #1
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this is ma first ever open mic.....i wrote it in ma english class 2day....peep it and tell me ways i cud improve and tell me ma bad points plz

Sittin here all alone in this class thinkin of nuffin but rappin
Looking around at my surroundings waiting for sumthin 2 happen
Im surrounded by words but i still cant rhyme
Thinkin about my childhood wen i commtted crime after crime
I feel as though my life is a mistake i wana start over
Life carrys on never stops restartin it is as rare as a 4 leaf clover
The weather is as dark and as dull as my life
I feel like diein or running away and endin it with a knife
I passed my class, but alls i did was write this rhyme
Got up and left whilst realisin my lifes dun its time
Got home started keyin this shit cos had nothin 2 do
Started sayin my prayers and tellin ma mom "I love You"
Imma bring an end 2 this shit, i dont think lifes right
Ive decided,lifes over gotta end this shit at nite....
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