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first post for a year, i think i improved
IP: 4E97 C1A7
as i said first drop here for a year got alot of shit for what i dropping before but i've gone away practiced my ass off and hopefully it's paid off, tell me what you think...
nobody told you i was this raw/ before you tried to grab the mic and got ya fist tore/ for being piss poor/ i'll be writing rhymes till' my wrists sore/ and i mean sore/ i'll twist you backwards like van damme, jean claude/ snap you in 2 like a bean stalk/ with the mean talk/ i wait patiently then swoop like a tree hawk/ (and another short written) i calculate rhymes in my brain, i'll even show the math i move so fast/ like a ghost i don't appear in photographs g.o.d on the mic, knowing all the facts/ even if you fixed the card game i'm holding all the jacks hot when you want like fire from a tap/ like a dog with diorea, i'm tired of the crap/ i'll kill people for cash call me the hired gat/ crouching tiger, hidden dragon, no wires from my back as much feedback as possible please, thanx for reading. |
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
both are pretty basic stuff, little bit of wordplay, but didnt really carry..... out of the 2 the second was better, slightly better flow and a bit more complex, tho still basic... try and even ya verses out a bit, and work on improving ya scheme, with some more complexity, internals n shit..... check mine out
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IP: 4577 CD9A
improved???..man I hate to be you..cause this was terrible...to be writing for awhile..this was very weak..your scheme didn't work well...your wordplay was garbage..just to name a few..
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IP: 76B1 9A60
This was ok....if you improved then well good!
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