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Old 01-27-04, 01:02 PM   #1
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its just a start!!!!

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yo
im gonna start rappin now cuz im at my wits end,
represent on yo asses without the use of a sken,
i streight up ragglin rags and its had a great effect on me,/
but dats wot they say to a boy from the industry,/
i keep on tryin, i keep it sweet, i keep it right, it aint my fault ya see,
its just my blood it boils from way down in me,
but im gonna keep on tring just wait g.///////

theres alot to prove in this world of rap,
and its now hard to speak without gettin attacked
most of them just speak the same, stories with complicated words which just sound insane,
but i eat at ur membrane,
this is only a semi dose but i aint ashamed,
dont say im shit cuz im from the uk//
this is just the beggin of an erray,
like a shine of light that gets in ya way,
for now ill keep it simple cuz im bright like a ray
and if i let lose now what would i have left to say.

justa starter. got some fatta raps in da head.gets a bit mo complicated..
bit by bit.
then ill let lose. theres alot install.
hail Eskiboy***
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Old 01-27-04, 01:04 PM   #2
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and now..this was your end..cause this was terrible...good-bye~~
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Old 01-27-04, 02:55 PM   #3
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Yeah this wasnt all that good here....you need to work on your structure though a bit, try to even the lines out a bit better, cause some of the lines were stretched out....also try adding some multies to this to make i better...but keep at it man.
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