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niggas shout at me so I got to shout at them/niggas swing I swing and wait for the outcome/studio gangsta's love to talk trash/like real big niggas can't get up in that ass/yo bring the yo whole unit,not afraid of none of them/watz the deally yo reall ill get at any of them/nigga im as bad as it gets, nigga my lil brotha more man then u i know why cause u a bitch/nigga u bet not try to suck up when i kill ya im goin to chop ya up/nigga u cant handle me and u my first, when thirsty im just goin to kill ya cause yo blood will forfill my thirst/nigga u try to act like u dont know me, but bitch i killed and murdered yo whole family,except yo motha and the whole reason she aint dead is cause she begged me to fuck ha/nigga u know about the king, u know bout me.

Ive seen newbies n herbs… but yours is a league of few
Try the two combined… NOW ya half way to you!
N that brings me to the next question… what ya bring?
All I’m seeing is a ‘fag’… hanging on the vets ‘ring’!
So fuck off, go ‘rim’ ya hommies… let them taste ya
Cos RB don’t need ya… we on PC, you play like Amiga!
You haven’t got a structure or any set flow
last time you dropped hard was when your mother let go
So go ‘mumble’ somewhere else… stop wasting my time
Sick of wastin space… adding defeat to a noobs rhymes

dev takes this with a MUCH MUCH MUCH better verse..... silent mumbles came very newbish,, you need to learn what a punchline is... use some worplay and actually diss the guy you battle,, thats the whole point,.. pretty weak battle but dev's structure was on point (i think he copied it off me lol) and his punches were better but few..

vote dev

Dev came WAY harder. Silent Mumbles is still in his n00b stages.. which isn't a bad thing.. you'll learn the lingo soon SM. Basically Dev takes this in every category. Punches, Wordplay, and Flow. But Dev still didn't come that hard and could have come better. Keep your head up silent.

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Battle Was Weeaaaak. God Damn. . Mumbles, You Need A Structure, Flow, And Punches. Not Much you Can Say About This Battle. Shit Was Lopsided. Dev Had The Punches, Weak Ones, But They ARE Required In A Battle In Order To Win, Mumbles, You're Attempt At Punches Were Horribly Bad. Dev Took This Simply Because Of Punches, Easy To Read Structure. . All That Shit. Mumbles, Punches (Good Ones Tho) = Win. Remember That, Elevate, Try Again.

Vote - - Dev.

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niggas shout at me so I got to shout at them/niggas swing I swing and wait for the outcome/studio gangsta's love to talk trash/like real big niggas can't get up in that ass/yo bring the yo whole unit,not afraid of none of them/watz the deally yo reall ill get at any of them/nigga im as bad as it gets, nigga my lil brotha more man then u i know why cause u a bitch/nigga u bet not try to suck up when i kill ya im goin to chop ya up/nigga u cant handle me and u my first, when thirsty im just goin to kill ya cause yo blood will forfill my thirst/nigga u try to act like u dont know me, but bitch i killed and murdered yo whole family,except yo motha and the whole reason she aint dead is cause she begged me to fuck ha/nigga u know about the king, u know bout me.

basic verse..not many hard punches or punches that really hit at all...like everyone else said your stil in ya newbie stage and thats ok...you will learn what is played and not played and will improve on ya punches.. the punches you had here were like i said before weak and played, they didnt hit well and the set up was basic along with the rhyme scheme and wording...your structure is bad and next time write out ya verse like Dev did


Dev

Ive seen newbies n herbs… but yours is a league of few
Try the two combined… NOW ya half way to you!
N that brings me to the next question… what ya bring?
All I’m seeing is a ‘fag’… hanging on the vets ‘ring’!
So fuck off, go ‘rim’ ya hommies… let them taste ya
Cos RB don’t need ya… we on PC, you play like Amiga!
You haven’t got a structure or any set flow
last time you dropped hard was when your mother let go
So go ‘mumble’ somewhere else… stop wasting my time
Sick of wastin space… adding defeat to a noobs rhymes

not a bad verse here..you came much better then SM in everything.. you took this battle wit ya punches and wordplay...SM didnt have any of that... your flow was straight threw out the whole thing and ya struct was great...keep battling

my vote - Dev for a much better verse..he took this in every cata.

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Dev Gets My Vote.........................Why Becuz He Came Way Harder On This Battle

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Dev was pretty funny and did it way better than the other cat.
he had better everything, punches and personals, wordplay..... everything
silent did it well to be a newby, but...
vote: dev

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Punches: DEV
WordplayEV
Meta’sEV
CreativityEV
Personals:none
FlowEV
Multi’sEV

Vote: DEV

This was a blow out battle. Dev just hammered silent constantly. Silent's verse was too simple to even compete.


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Flow=Dev, just look above and you'll see what I mean. Silent needs to work on his some.

Punches=Dev, his punches just hit harder.

Personals=Dev, more personals and they were better as well.

Vocab=Dev, neither put to much vocab in this one, but silent repeated the same words a lot.

Over all=Dev, he just took this with a much stronger drop

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