10 Lines
30 Minutes After Check In
You Spit First, Ya Made The Call Out
Regular Rules, Crew Votes Voids N Shit.

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checkin in good luck

Check. . will drop blind spit when you do, good luck, Pz.

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Im like a period my flow comes naturally
But im not claimin that im crazy and ill snatch up a V
Im like a helium balloon cause I never come down
The hemofellia insues when all the bloods pourin out
My shit is premium like keystone so I feast on any emcees
Im takin measures like a teaspoon
I exploit your weakness and I break it right off
Our flows are like pretzels im hard and your soft
Face it I spit it hard as shit from my basement
Tight like my Jordan right before I unlaced it

the V is referring to a victory for anyone that wasnt clear to

Aiight. .

Serious. .

If Your Flow Is Like Period. . Fuck Dog This Verse Is The Tampax
Ideal Never Got The V, Cause It Ran Past You. . So I'll Take That

And I Bet Your Ass'll Come Down, With Simple Prick Of My Lyrics
You Don't Feast On MC's, You Just Eat, Jenny Craig Status, You Nearin' It

He Measures With Teaspoons, Well Fuck Kid, I Measure With Cups
I'll Take A Shit In Your Basement, Now THAT's Hard, And What ?

And Fucka Jordan Shoe, Serious, Who The Fuck Was You Writing To ?
Did You Bite, Recite, Pre-Write ? Holy Shit ! I See Another MC In You !

I'm Usually In Open Mic, But Man, I Had To Reach Out For The Mass Appeal
You're New. . Fucking Leave. . Wow, How Is That For Ideal ?

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uppin this shit .

Aiight. . Voting Time. .

One Explaination, Case It Goes Over Someone's Head. . 2nd Line. . Ideal Never Got The V Cause It Ran Past You (V is after U)

Pz.

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Formula took this one, ideal looks pretty new. Ideal your shit just didn't hit hard at all, but your new, just keep at it. Formula i liked the flow, but responding to almost every single one of his lines got a bit repetetive. Vote: FormulaMC

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"I'm posessed by Hip Hop's delivering spirit, and i fear it cuz my head is constantly scribbling lyrics"
-Benefit

Im like a period my flow comes naturally
But im not claimin that im crazy and ill snatch up a V
kind of weak opening.. Needed more direction to dissing dissing your opponent, along with more of a punch. the metaphor is kind of played
Im like a helium balloon cause I never come down
The hemofellia insues when all the bloods pourin out
metas alright here, along its lacking a punch, the follow through could have been set better
My shit is premium like keystone so I feast on any emcees
Im takin measures like a teaspoon
the concept on your follow through wasnt bad, if you put more on it.. Needee more of a punchline though
I exploit your weakness and I break it right off
Our flows are like pretzels im hard and your soft
this bar was looking alright,but could have been spit a little harder with some rewording
Face it I spit it hard as shit from my basement
Tight like my Jordan right before I unlaced it
ending wasnt bad, althought the punch could have been better

Over all you need a little more with your punchs, trying going at dissing your opponent a littlemore, it could help alot i think. After that try working on bringing some multis and then work on your metaphors, so far there ya best thing


If Your Flow Is Like Period. . Fuck Dog This Verse Is The Tampax
Ideal Never Got The V, Cause It Ran Past You. . So I'll Take That
the opening line is alright, good feed off his verse, i woulda kept away from feeding but its alright with the punch. follow through culd have came off better
And I Bet Your Ass'll Come Down, With Simple Prick Of My Lyrics
You Don't Feast On MC's, You Just Eat, Jenny Craig Status, You Nearin' It
off flow here.. alright metaphor on the follow through but sort of played. Needed a little more strength in your punch
He Measures With Teaspoons, Well Fuck Kid, I Measure With Cups
I'll Take A Shit In Your Basement, Now THAT's Hard, And What ?
your follow through wasnt that good, could have put a little more effert into it. set was ok
And Fucka Jordan Shoe, Serious, Who The Fuck Was You Writing To ?
Did You Bite, Recite, Pre-Write ? Holy Shit ! I See Another MC In You !
kind of weak with a punch. follow through was decent
I'm Usually In Open Mic, But Man, I Had To Reach Out For The Mass Appeal
You're New. . Fucking Leave. . Wow, How Is That For Ideal ?
ending isnt much. culd have been spit better. concept was alright

Over all you feed on ever bar you spit, which just shows that you need another emcees lyrics in order to spit half way decent. None of your punchs were really that hard your structure was alright, but your were a little off flow

vote- Formula

Came with more punchs, the strength in both verses wasnt much, over all a nice newbie battle.

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2 votes for me and neither polled. . ya'll gotta poll vote. Outcome, this would be a nice newbie battle. . if I was a newbie, I don't do battles here much, strictly open mics N shit. Uppin for more vote, remember to Poll.

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