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IP: 07E0 A9F2
In a state of dilution in confusion as to what is real
What’s the deal, is it what I feel or is that the illusion Either way its consuming too much time, so im assuming That it’s the one with best memories, that’s my conclusion So I don’t want it proven, or debated or run over by IQ For me it’ll do, im content, to be naïve and see it through A unique view, out the eyes of my inherent addiction In a world of abusers drinking and pop’n pills on prescription With permission by the authorities to take n fake a script So in my eyes it’s acceptable to drop shit n roll with it On a regular prevalence, don’t commit tho consume a bit But I permit, its my choice to make like “shall I take a hit” None of your business, what is this, do I tell you when to shit? It’s my world and im in it til it dissolves into the abyss Cos I wanna reminisce, bout good times, I wanna live it all Don’t wanna die an old man that’s done nuthin but crawl Im a young man running for the haul of living enthralled By the opportunities to enter into that different world Where aches and worries are wiped out by concocted assistance And my low resistance to a doorway to beyond the listed The suit’s, plumbers, bricky’s, dentists, cos im mentally gifted Run on amphetamines to let my screams be ranked unlisted So unlived it, that’s the dream, concurrent world set in my mind Where it’s undefined by reality, a catarax deeming me blind To the hardship and destitution of the 21st kind Cos im too entwined in my own zone like a creeping vine Cos like wine I ferment with drugs n alcohol to form my life And I live it in a dream, never knowing which will turn out right…. |
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IP: 2F46 BF0E
damn....this piece had very nice flow the entire way through....i also especially enjoyed the first 6 lines...started it off great...another excellent piece from Dev....keep up the good work homie......
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IP: 76B1 9A60
I agree this was a good piece here.....the flow in this was real nice, it flowed pretty smooth i thought through out the piece....vocab was good as it always is from you lol...the content in this i thought was good, made a good read....overall this was a nice piece....keep at it.
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
thnx credz n diverse... ill be sure to hit yours up......
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
stop sleeping.....
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IP: DF7B C8F7
Tight drop man... vocab and flow were always on point...
Good subject... like the way it was expressed... Real nice man... enjoyed reading it... |
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..Soft Focus..
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IP: 1B3B C284
Great piece you wrote. The flow was good, along with the structure. tyou had a good rhyme scheme, nice multies. i enjoyed this line
Don’t wanna die an old man that’s done nuthin but crawl Im a young man running for the haul of living enthralled I really liked that line...hit hard..creative...very meaningful...great piece... if you could...hit up something in my sig...thanks
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
eventually some replies.... thnx for those... appreciated...
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IP: 4287 3F49
i thought i responded 2 this.......damnit i need 2 stop drinking. Good drop man as usual it was dope
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IP: 5AF5 5CA5
thnx man.... ya dunked bum......lol
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IP: 37A2 2804
I liked the topic choice. The flow was really good. So was the rhyme scheme.
I rate this a 9/10. Keep Dropping. peace.
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IP: 0C1E A020
yea real tight piece, nice flow vocab,
you basically had everything in there ya needed. 8/10. nice spit |
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