hahaha listen boy u know the name it be silent i tired of bitch ass by the name of envied talent...he think he the shit cause he beat young cot and now he want to talk but he want after i tell him that i fucked his mom 2 years ago and now thats why she walk bo legged when she walk...i got yo mom numba in my pocket bitch im silent mumbles u mess u want to mess wit me i get a fork and take yo fuckin out of yo socket.... u tryin act like u a test but when i put silent mumbles on yo chest.... and that bitch ass dude name wise ways bitch u betta start countin down yo days cause im comin wit yo gurlfriend or yo wife but bitch when u see me u betta a gun or a knife ... dont get mad cause yo bitch is ugly man i think wise ways and evied talent are fuckin buddies... bitch u just anotha bitch thats going to hate u just mad cause u cant carry my weight and i only do this shit just to get rich and u fuck wit silent mumbles im going to splatta yo shit and boy i aint goin to hata ya but u want get yo name out i will help ya by killin ya i will put ya on front page of the newspapa... i know youll dont think i could come i could come this hard and u didnt think i could come this far but thats why im tearin out yo heart... im treatin youll like youll some toy im bout to be the reason why yo favorite rappa aint yo favorite no more.... so i bet yo bitches stop runnin that mouth u find me boy im the newest and hottes rappa in the south if i catch youll runnin that mouth im goin to put that gun in yo mouth... boy im still goin boy i aint dead boy when i put that gun in yo mouth u goin to have a whole in the back of yo head. THIS WAS WROTE BY SILENT MUMBLES

Well lol....this wasnt that good.....dont structure it like that...dont put it in paragraph form....put it line on top of line so its easier to read...and it does help the flow out in your pieces....which this didnt really flow too well.....but just keep at it.

i agree, this didnt read very good, as credz said the paragraph shit rarely works, unless the flow is perfect... also ya rhyming was basic... too much rhyming the same word... you need to elevate... i only read half of it, and i bet most do.... work on a better scheme and flow.... first that it

what the fuck was this???...I stopped reading after few lines...