1. Keep spinnin them records till this wanna be fake falls whys he poundin the keyboard like his dick wheres his balls
2. why u try and bring this shit your just an average joe when we all know your rhymes they just really blow
3. Just like your girl shes good up in the movies pulled down my pants after I played with her booobies
4. Don’t cry I aint the first u no she gets around,,,,first time I met her she had them legs spread up on the ground
5. U already startin to sweat come on now I just started the show,,, guess nows agood time to tell ya I had your mom too ya shes hoe
6. Woooo damn getting rough I better slow down this your speed NAH… this your speed haha keep smiling fuckin clown
7. Your boys prob join my crew when Im done,,,,, some sayin im your daddy and its true u just my son
8. U getting weak at the knees I guess im done now,,,,,,, and u can try and bring it to my level na just bow that ass down
9. Youll prob be tryin to find me and make truce after this rhyme cause damn after this u no its only working for ya part-time
10. Some peole sayin u got your own CD,,,,, right made on your own computer
11. Mater fact I saw u flyin home from best buy,,,,,,, ya nice SCOOTER
12. Man im getting tired now this shits way too easy and I gotta hear otheres talk now I know there gonna make me sleepy?

wow! your a dope..i hope i never face you.....LMAO...yeah ok

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don't give yourself credit son this shit was garbage beyond belief i hope to god that you didn't consider this to hold any creds any where but anyways you need to strengthen your flow vocab and while you're at it kick out a few more methaphors, look just don't go braggin before you get ripped so type quikly

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shut the fuck up

even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun

dead in middle of little of little italy
little did we know that we riddle
some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun

yah i didnt mean to come out lookin like a hard ass but i figured that was the best thing to name it to get people to check it out i appreciate all the feedback didnt expect anything great this my first one.

Get rid of the numbers...it makes you look as stupid as you are..once done i'll give you more adivce..

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Retarded people's heads are to big..I'll be back with something just as funny as watching the Special Olympics..don't worry..

pretty good. enjoyed the multies. it was simple but had a little pizazz topic. i like
the topic. nice way to catch peoples attention. well written. structure culd
be fixed. but overall. nicely done.

hit this up in return plz:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...d.php?p=1162082

thanx
peace

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Did you read it? People like you should be banned.

WTF??? you should die..and the guy with a gay reply,take him with you..

www.50cent.com/forum

try that..

lmfao... what a fan base your building.... fraid im going with them...garbage... work on everything...