ok im new to this site, looks interesting so i decided to add my 2 cents. just something rough, but interesting in hearing any pointers/opinions/help offered.


we committed to the war, call it a tv show
although we know the consequences we still go
like RAw we wrestle problems as a superstar
prayin its been prewritten in phrophecies of the stars
by far we dealin with the devil...the worlds full of evil
alarmed by the changin world...religion moulds people
in reality it really just brainwashes people
to fight for their beliefs...wait isnt war evil?
Hell yeah and i say that with a capital H
my words hit u harder then a punch in the face
like mace i spray continuous like those cops in the state
of queensland, abusing their queens hand in haste
so in case of trouble i feed my dogs gunpowder like B I G
so they can devour any P I G
that trys to arrest me over some T H C
leave em R I P in all my boys memories.

Not bad i guess...........if your new..........but keep it real dawg..........you know what im saying? like Free said Self glorification is frowned upon unless your ina battle......but keep doin your thing an dont let anyone bring ya down.........peace.........hit up my latest open mic!

Foresight
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=113141

not bad for a noob but ya need to serioulsy elevate, go to the wackness center. that should help you out!!! out

freeman i see your point, but it wasnt meant for self glorification...a friend of mine went out like that so i was just speaking with him on my mind...but thanks for the advice, ill remember that next time.

ok one quick 16 i just wrote...lookin at it now it still lacks vocab, but common words can be used effectively to get a message across.

from the blunt to the bong ill be blunt in this song
i get high not low so im no lil jon
although i flow like h20
i burn hydro...love the way it dissolves
but my world dont revolve around mary jane
simple and plain i evolved from the pain
and the pressure that tests ya temper everyday
no free rides here in western sydney
we just live in debt and financial regrets
financial stress tests all our limits
borders our minds but reorders my lines
to find a solution, a truth with no lies
to prove our demise arrives in no time
we need to realise we live off our pride,
experience is the key for us to survive
so expect the solution to open up your eyes.