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02-04-04, 09:09 PM
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Eddy.
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Edicius Ft. Maven - W.e u want.
IP: 77D5 6AAD
Maven
the steel door remains cold against my paling skin, where to begin? to compare my life to God would be a sin, but everything it relative, that is, relating to myself sedating my own wealth, forcing you to buy my shelf as it sits there, lonely, containing the meaning of life but it's much to high for you to reach, or cut down with a knife your glance was sharp, but made me feel sensationally dull and the pull of the waves, relates to the strength of the hull, but the waves crash harder and harder, until the hull smashes, and flames leap from sad faces that dwell within the ashes.... of my mind flame, my kinds the same as the homeless man, living without a plan, but needing to be guided by the hand and the pieces of my mind reach forward sometimes and you can see the pain and agony that make me smile with the glee that dwell in the space in which I cannot reach, but if you smash the hull enough, I just might give speach, to beseech you to reconsider the pain you put me through showing this kindness on me, what am I to do? I'm only human Yea aint we all.. damn .. we just made to rise, but fragile when it comes to fall.. Edicius A corridor of boxed memories...but what do they teach? a sealed of section in my mind & a truth so far to reach & i try to hide the truth,..yet the truth is to deep in me I started at pole , but finished last in my own grand prix I got a roof above my head yea but mostly i feel so sad the migration is just to big, & i just feel small like a shad In this sea of colliding feelings, confusion is nothing new im just looking for that small gap for me to squeek trough An escape, a break out & no doubt that its kind off hard but its better than this shit hole,that im in from the start I saw no other ways..& all the exits just remained closed i opened my heart for real this time.. But it resulted my heart into enclosed.. I guess im just not made for changes & feelings that invade my sytem, cause it will respond to it like its being betrayed..
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02-05-04, 07:40 AM
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Eddy.
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IP: 77D5 6AAD
Wtf..Up.
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02-05-04, 05:00 PM
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IP: D637 72D3
I agree.
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02-05-04, 05:11 PM
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Maven.. thought you showed great imagery, combined with the wordplay, really built it up..... and i liked the way you finished it... what else can i say the schmeme n shit were tight....
Ed.. again good wordplay, and felt this seemed deeper than mav's... but not as much imagery... a nice flow n scheme again...lol.... ...but yeah overall ill collab.... deep and combined they had it done.... |
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02-06-04, 05:57 AM
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Eddy.
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IP: 77D5 6AAD
Lol.. thnx.. upper..
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02-06-04, 06:05 AM
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IP: 7E66 A2E6
Edicus great verse but I hated the use of 'truth' three time is two lines. I know you have a better vocab then that just by reading the rest.
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02-07-04, 04:14 PM
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^up
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02-07-04, 06:04 PM
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wanna play doctor????????
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damn a very strong piece here
the quality of this toical was very good emotion was strong thoughout both pieces both of you came really good here with a good conept to the piece a pretty nice read here.. i like maven's style also |
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