I always come in here and give feedback even if i dont drop anything but since i follow rules here are three i just did:
Realist and Ghod: Potential Eyes
Auspicicous: Something Merry
Aragorn: forgot the title

This is my first collab...here it gooooooooooooooes

Whitelightning:
Throughtout The Many Stages Of Life Growin Up
Many Sources Diversift Simplicity, Makin Life Tough
Verbal Statements Pulling Brain Thoughts In Multiple Directions
Actions Create Friendly Factions, Reactin Parental Sanctions
Free Range Or Put Under Civil House Arrest Is Under Extreme Protest
They Think What's Best, But It Add's Weight To Your Chest
Slip On Headphones, Your Now Delivered A Different Message
Livin On Edge, Disrespectin Proper Morals, Destroyin Ledges
Canyons Full Of Dismal Dismay, No Clear Way To Turn
Supposed To Learn In Life, Endless Strife, Cause For Constant Concern
Independance Is Only Positive Until You Striding Astray
Everyday Parents Worry, Don't Know What To Say, Keepin Em at Bay
This Trust Must Be Built On A Permanent Foundation
Create Examples For Next Generations, Show What They Will Be Facin
You Can't Rewind Pittiful Actions Or Freeze Real Time
In Your Mind, The Answers You Will Find, Many Different Kinds
Biases Playing Major Role Of Personal Endeavours, Continued Suspense
Which Source Will Be Your Prominent Influence...

Speek.E.Z.:
Do My Words Reach Millions? Do They Actually Listen..
Do They Start Hating If I Drop The Name High Class For Dissing?..
Do They Understand My Mission Or Are They Caught In The Hype..
Do They Wear What I Wear Just Because Of What I Write..
If I Say I Pack Heat.. Do They Go Out And By A Heater..
If I Call A Girl A Bitch, Is That The Way They Start 2 Treat Her..
Are My Lyrics More Then Words? Are They A Way Of Life?..
Don’t Compare Your Life, With The Way I Deal With My Strife..
We Will Probably Never Meet, But Do You Consider Me A Friend?..
My Lyrics Aren’t Specified They Are Just A Piece Of Mind I Lend..
And In The End We Need To Realize How Much Power We Hold..
Highlight The Meanings In Bold, Then We Make Riches In Gold..
A Pen And Paper And A Way Of Life For Anyone That Reads This..
For Us To Fix The Game, We Need To Realize That Influence Exists..

Emerge:
Many circumstances invest one of which is a pounding chest
Yet I infest with my Jedi ingress…admiring only the best
I only assimilate those traits for those fighting inevitable losses
None of them considered prophets nor assembled on crosses
Fighting by their own beliefs a gene damn worthy of bequeath
Love, faith, religion, & moral discipline none ever placed beneath
Under vain pleasures…or instant gratification…of their own
Eternal flames light enlightening even without a sun still shone
Never will they dare accept theories imposed…a mortal sin
Calm in presentation even in defeat not to mention…a win
Everyone I ever looked up to for bravery not necessarily morals
Orals dictated eloquently such manner cutting enemies like chorals
Values so important…enough to disregard the loves of his life
Even willing to rest unpeacefully knowing he widowed a wife
Ready yet shooken steadily looking…into a one inch tunnel
Yes…he is prepared to drop his life into the forgotten funnel
Only thing worth living for got you determined with imprudence
Under no circumstance should you compromise love for influence

this was dope.. didn't know wl was in on it.. but it was a good surprise we all came dope

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this was good i liked everything

i already say speeks verse like 3 days ago lol


keep droppin Pz

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INFINITES MP3'S

Nice job. I liked this collab, many times the different styles of writters cause the collab to seem a bit messy, all over the place. Not in this case each one of you complamented eachothers verse quit well. Complexity was there as well as flow, I liked the imagery as well as the long lines. I think longer lines help story type drops gain momentum in a hurry. Just my opinion but yeah great collab. All three of you did a great job on this! I bet the audio would be nice, any plans on an audio version? Keep doing good things for the site...

~Bounce~

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FUCKA BABYLON BANDIT!!!

/\ thanks a lot man i appreciate it

oh shit i just barely noticed something about my verse i had not seen...

Look at the first letters of each line on my verse

white...thought the vocab was good...helped with the flow of it...well worked sylables...but thought it was a bit jumpy..with the way ya sentences were structured.....other than that nice verse..liked the scheme..
speek...liked the perspective you came from...maybe the vocab could have been expanded on..thought the second half was better...the first seemed to be a bit of a filler.... but the style went well with the others...good contrast....good verse
emerge...another different style to the others...had a good flow going, except it fell in the middle...ya vocab was ok...some lines seemed to lack...but again i liked the scheme... so yeah not a bad verse...
overall i thought the three styles went well together....nice collab overall...all could use work in little ways..but whos doesnt?.....pZ

eehhh, fucking hell i jus noticed... got some mad shit going on there.... very creative...MYINFLUENCEOVERYOU.....Tight!!!!!!

uppin this

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upppppppppp

Yeah this was a real good collab here.....enjoyed the read from all 3 people....structure from all 3 was real good......flow in all 3 verses seemed to be good, it stayed on through out the whole piece, didnt really get off at all in this...liked the vocab from all 3 of you....had some good multies in there...overall this was a good collab....made a good read....and keep at it.

Emerge ... you murdered it dunny ... fa sho...

speek... this is the first drop i've seen from you... nastier then a sucked dick!...

White ... u talk to much ish... saying i'm garbage... son.. u are... but on this peice.... but you was coo ... no hate... i never hate... i came with yo A game for ya team... good...

Good Collab... keep doin it...

Caesar-On3

Great collaboration! The theme remained constant throughout and I could hear the three different verses flowing seemlessly on a beat, even though the flows were all quite different.

The vocab was lacking in only a couple of places, but not enough to hurt the overall piece. I think you three should collaborate more often.

Hit me up:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=100974

Tight Collab...Emerge Ripped This Shit.....................WhiteLightening Damn Kid Chill..lol.....Some Fake Peeps Ice on Hurr gon' Melt Kid...Speek E.Z. You Pretty Nice Kid....Keep At it....You'll Elevate to a Great Mc Sooner Or Later