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Old 02-16-04, 04:00 AM   #1
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THESE CATS THINKIN IM NEW REALLY I BEEN THROUGH YO TOWN
I JUST HAD TO EXCAPE THEY TRIED TO KEEP ME UNDER THE GROUND
BUT IT AINT GONE HAPPEN SO I STICK TO RAPS
GOT MY BACK AGAINST THE WALL SO I STICK WIT STRAPS
BOTH HEATS LOADED WHILE IM HITTEN MY STRING BEANS
IM DOIN DIRT BUT STILL MANAGE TO KEEP THE JEANS CLEAN
NAW MEAN
WHILE THESE HATAS TRY AND CALL ME OUT
THATS WHY I FLOW LIKE A RIVER WHILE THEY WELL RUN OUT
FASHO
ILL JUST KEEP MOVIN POUNDS OF DRO
ILL JUST KEEP WINNIN BATTLES NO MATTER HOW MANY ROUNDS IT GO
ILL JUST STICK WIT THE STICKS IM ALL MADDEN WIT THE SHOW
STICK TO THE SCRIPT YALL GET HAPPY WHEN I FLOW
YALL STICKIN TO MY DIC WORSE THAN CHICKS IN THE HOOD
IM TAKIN YA BREATH PLUS A LITTLE DIP OF YA GOODS
ILL BATTLE ANYBODY JUST HIT ME UP
I GOT RHYMES I DONT NEED A SHOFUR TO PICK ME UP
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Old 02-16-04, 05:23 AM   #2
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This was just aiight.....the way this is written...it seems like you havent been rapping for too long...all i can really say is keep practicing....

this is supposed to be a battle rhyme right?...."ILL JUST STICK WIT THE STICKS IM ALL MADDEN WIT THE SHOW"
you have to come harder than that man....but you had a couple cool lines like "ILL JUST KEEP MOVIN POUNDS OF DRO
ILL JUST KEEP WINNIN BATTLES NO MATTER HOW MANY ROUNDS IT GO"...and "IM DOIN DIRT BUT STILL MANAGE TO KEEP THE JEANS CLEAN"...with a battle rhyme...just come with the illest that you can possibly come up with...im out
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Old 02-16-04, 01:36 PM   #3
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