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02-16-04, 09:41 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Definition of a good rapper
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(this rhyme was easy, basically I just desribed Jay-Z, biggie, nas, eminem and myself and maybe you, now let's see if you like it
If you nice you don't write at all Flows are on call You never studder or pause Audience left in awe When seen a freestyle is requested Opponents corrected Punchlines connected with perfection Also a hidden lesson defying doubt is your proffesion During a battle you get close I can see the hair in your nose eyelids wide and froze at school lunchtime is a hip-hop show but we aint talking hip-hop as you know we talking about emcees face to face in lyrical rage It's all freestyle no time to read off a page Nice flows are called written Tight flows are called bitten It certain when you open your mouth its curtains your props deservin You aint just cursin when you spit to hear it is worth it In fact it's perfect
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02-16-04, 09:54 PM | #2 | ||||
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hmmmm...not so sure about this peice...lines seemed short...and it was short. I didnt find a meaning to this peice. You had some good wordplay throuhout this peice and the idea was allright. Decent peice i guess
hit this up http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114704
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02-17-04, 08:09 AM | #3 | |||||||
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i want yall to reply.....whether it's hate...a diss... or it's help... but reply yall
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02-17-04, 08:42 AM | #4 | |||||||
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This piece has the potential to be dope...
The content was there although the subject is a little played, line length needs sortin out and it needs to be a bit more complex. I got the impression this was wrote in about 5 minutes. If you took more time on it then it could be a lot better. Check mine out....links in my sig |
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02-17-04, 10:09 AM | #5 | |||||||
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3 replies is fine
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02-17-04, 03:11 PM | #6 | ||||
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This was alright i thought.....lines were kinda short though lol....try making your lines a little longer though so you can make it more complex....the content was alright in this....vocab was alright i thought....overall a alright piece...keep at it.
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02-17-04, 09:08 PM | #7 | |||||||
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Thanks niggas...yall are gonna turn me into a sick emcee. I am already the governor of the cypher(post tha most)...yall gonna make me a senator(most respected) of the open mic...anyway thanks for ya input, but I need structure help.Give examples...structure101
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